Hi @Crunch I'm here to do a very quick review on your poem, so let's get right into it shell we.
When you are consumed by struggle
And hope has abandoned you
Go and lie in a place of stillness
Listen to the air
Hear what it tells you
Take its advice, and whisper in reply:
“Tomorrow My fate is undecided.
Tomorrow I will fight for change.
Tomorrow My efforts will have meaning,
and I am capable of anything.
but today
all is what is
what will be will be
i am a small part of forces that eclipse me
and the mountains may outlast my body but they will not outlive me
because life and self are nothing but
glorious illusion
Tomorrow I am powerful,
but today i know peace
because the mountains and i
are one”
I loved reading your poem it was so true, and lovely, I felt like I was right in the middle of it, I am going to say it was amazing to read, that's for sure. Wrote it so well, it even mad me feel some comfort in some way. I felt like this poem had such a meaning behind it, and a wonderful one at that.
On another note: Are you okay, because I from writing poems, I write things like this when somethings going on. I hope everything alright, if you need to chat my PM box is always open. <33
That's all that I can say about this it was a wonderful poem to read, I do hope we can get to no each other more around YWS in the future. I also look forward to reading more of the things your write.
I hope you have a great day/night witch ever side of the world your on.
@Dossereana Flying Over The Green Room And Spreading Shards Of Encouragement
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