Please feel free to ignore mcey advice it is not intended to offend you hurt you demean you or your story in anyway, that said please brace yourself.
1. Word usage and repidition
Okay this is good but, I think you don't need to repeat you don't know me at all more then three or four times per paragraph. Okay so I an knew to reviewing liyrics but I have listened to alot of songs and none have ever repeated the main line more then a few times.
2. General
Forgive me for this but-your married aren't you? I think you could add in some sorrow into this, okay so we know that the writer is tired of bitterness but talk about his pain that his/her
s sorrow at the fact that he thinks all those nasty things.
Otherwise I think this is perfect. Amazing job!
Points: 575
Reviews: 212
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