He is the one who:
gives you butterflies
makes you sad
makes you happy
makes you have a reason to keep going
He is the reason
He is the one who:
makes you hurry through the halls just to see him
makes your day
the one you eat lunch with
send you the right thing
at the right moment
He is the cause
He is the one who
Can turn around your frown
you can call anytime
the first thought you think-
the only thought you think
He is the one.
He is the one who says "I love you"
And you feel the same without hesitation.
You are the one who:
He thinks about all the time
spends his time with
he loves with all his heart
talks to you anytime
eats lunch with
hurries throughout the halls just to see
would do anything for,
Just to let you know he loves you.
When you say to him "I love you"
He feels the same with out hesitation.
Together, you are the one you love.
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I think the concept is good but there are flaws. First you have a lot of repetition. second you need to add more and take out the repeated parts. then check all of your spelling. also you have grammar mistakes. just fix those and you'll be golden. also you should have to rewrite it.
The repetition is needed, it is PART of the poem!
I think the concept is good but there are flaws. First you have a lot of repetition. second you need to add more and take out the repeated parts. then check all of your spelling. also you have grammar mistakes. just fix those and you'll be golden. also you should have to rewrite it.
Hello chrissy, happy review day!
First of all I would like to say that I like the uniqueness of your structure. By placing it to the right side instead of the left makes it more intriguing. (Even if this was a mistake, it was a beneficial mistake XD) you bolden and put right and only in italics. By doing this, you enhance their importance and they do not go overlooked. These two words create the idea that settles in many minds - the idea of finding the only right one for you to love.
I noticed that you use hardly any punctuation-is this on purpose? If it is it creates a pace which flutters along to a flying heartbeat; the feeling you get when you fall in love. (If it isn't I suggest adding a few commas here and there to make the poem easier to read out loud)
I love how you use he and you instead of I and a name. This makes the poem more relatable for the reader, thus causing a memorable and meaningful effect for them. You create a powerful impact at the end with that last line. You show us the message that one must love on self before they can truly love another.
Overall, this was a very beautiful poem and I enjoyed reading it ^-^
Well, that's all from me,
Godly
Yay! Thanks!
Hi Chrissy.
So I really like this and the thing it is portraying. I like how you repeated lines to make a point. I think the formatting really could have been a little better though. But, anyway, great job! Once again, great job, Chrissy!
Congrats on spotlight!!
Keep writing!!,
~Tiff
Thanks! Yeah, the thing was not letting me position it well...
This is really an awe poem/poetry or whatever you call it! I should think that this is very good for a marriage BECAUSE This is is important! Nothing is better than love. Love is life. Love is pure light. Love is out of the darkness, love in out of the shadows.
What you really need to know is that, you have a creative mind to do this. You think this is so possible, but it isn't. To think of it and write it, to have the idea of it. It is really, pretty much, justas well, impossible. So if you can do the impossible, then you have a far more creative mind than me, them, he ,she we, they. They are down! I am down! You are up, just because you are smart. Nice job!
Thank you!