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I liked rhymes. It's kind of unique.
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The whole verse brings lots of energy. And this energy flow doesn't go down, it keeps this... thrust.
Something is really bothering you - it's easy to see ^_^ (duuh!)
But it's great sometimes to have that kind of a feeling, to be hurt from your own sins. We all want to get rid of responsibilities that our mistakes granted us. We want to get away from everything and start all over. but, we can't, you can't restart - "life is no nintendo game".
But if we try, I believe anyone can achieve peace of mind. ... but that's boring
Life in the sense of being able to restart may not be a Nintendo game but in the sense that there are so many different types of games out there that can be played, definitely it is a Nintendo game.
Common games
There are many games that we play. Here are some common ones which it is useful to understand and manage.
'Attraction-Rejection' Game - is the classic lovers' alternating chase game.
Blame Game - avoiding responsibility by blaming others.
'Catch me' Game - is about the thrill of the chase.
'Clever me' Game - seeking approval for things done well.
The Drama Triangle - The persecutor, victim and rescuer story.
'Poor me' Game - seeking sympathy by expounding on ills.
'Recognize me' Game: seeking attention to assuage limited self-esteem.
'Save me' Game - seeking salvation.
Status Game - elevating social position.
'Stop me' Game - the self-harm of addicts and others to get attention.
War Game - Destructive two-sided conflict.
Great poetry, I can see emotion in the righting.
One negative is a lack of rhyme, unless the writing is going for a more generic original feel.
Definitely original.
thanks