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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Hmm...well this was an interesting little story...I almost wonder if there was a deeper meaning somewhere hidden among this but I don't quite know, I wasn't really able to figure out something.
Anyway let's get right to it,
She looked out over the city, quiet, serene, simple. A certain coldness was in her eyes, one that burned into the soul of all who saw her. No one knew who she was. Though she was always there every Thursday evening. On top of the highest building in the small town… ten stories high.
Okay...well..that's a really interesting paragraph to start on. It's a pretty neat bit of description to show how things are running along in the city and then flash towards this person that hangs over it every week like some sort of shadow and guardian almost...well at least that's the kind of vibe I'm getting from this first chapter...let's see what comes after it I guess.
Several attempts had been made to get her down. By the time people got up there she was gone. She had become as part of the scenery to those living in the small town, but for me, being my first there, she stuck out like a great, serene, angel. To worried with matters of the high above to care for those below. And although her eyes were cold as ice, I could see the sadness in them. Cold, but miserable. No- not miserable. Sorrowful. Yeah.
Hmm...well that's certainly a very interesting observation...the eyes of a person certainly to tell a lot...and well..cold but sorrowful, that definitely makes for a really interesting description...and the fact that no one can get her down is even more interesting, and calling here a great serene angel all makes me think that there's potentially something pretty supernatural involved, well let's see I suppose.
I lived across the road from the building. Every thursday after school I’d look out of the apartment window to gaze at her and her sad eyes. For some reason, the more I stared at her, the sadder I became. Yet, also, the more I stared at her, the more I loved her.
Hmm...okay...this is getting a little bittersweet now, someone just observing this random almost supernatural seeming being, that appears to always be sad and then falling in love, it almost seems like falling in love with a ghost of some sort...well...this is going in a direction I didn't expect but it is a direction I definitely love.
Yes, I grew to love the sorrowful young girl who stood on the roof on thursdays.
Maybe it was her flowing brown hair, or her simple brown dress, torn at the edges. Perhaps it was how beautiful she was, or how serene.
Hmm...well with situations like that, you can never really tell which of those is the right reason, it might just be something else entirely, you never quite know at any rate....well this is going in a very interesting direction...well...let's see where this takes us.
Or how sorrowful.
I felt so close to her, every time I saw her I felt as if I knew her. But of course I didn’t.
After a while, looking at her made me feel bitter, and sorrowful. My feelings slowly died away.
Aww...well this is turning towards being a sad thing now...oh dear...well this is just going in yet another direction that I didn't expect it to and unlike the previous one, this doesn't seem to be very good and ahh....I'm conflicted now.
Now I stand atop the building opposite hers. Every Monday, looking towards the horizon as the sun sets to my back. Silently screaming at the sad, cruelness of the world.
Yes, it might have been the sadness, or the sereneness, but one thing is certain.
My soul has become as sorrowful as her heart.
And so it ends...with this person also becoming some sort of ghostly figure haunting the place every week...and his tale also becomes one of sorrow...oh well...I suppose there was nothing more you could expect considering what the title was...xD
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall it was a pretty decent story...and one that makes you think a lot...xD...or at least I thought a lot about what it might mean. Anyway that's all I've gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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