With a darkness around you,
nowhere to hide,
you only have one choice:
Fight.
Stand up tall and proud,
with a smile on your face.
Only one way to go,
and that way is up.
Rising to the top,
to leave that darkness behind,
coughing in the dust.
Friends, family, and personal strength,
all combine to overshadow the shadow.
And soon a day will come,
where you will forget,
the darkness which haunted you.
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Hey there! Shey here for a review!
I'll start this review off by saying I really enjoyed this poem. The rhythm was en pointe, and impressively so. It was flawless, honestly. So, great job for that!
The message was really nice as well, and I'm glad you shared it with us. It combined with the beautiful rhythm made this a really enjoyable work.
My only complaint is the lack of formatting. You should consider indenting, adding stanzas, etc. to really perpetuate the message and beauty of the poem. If you're having some difficulty formatting with the publishing center, that's understandable, as the publishing center is hard to manage. Check this out, How to Format Poetry, to get a better idea of how formatting in it works.
Overall, great piece! I apologize for not having much to say, but it was mostly perfect. So, keep up the great work!
I think I'm a tad bit too lazy for formatting with html but I'll do my best with my other poems, thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it so.
Much love, Anon.
XD okay, laziness is an acceptable excuse.
No problem! Good luck writing!
This was a good poem! I could feel the story behind it. Thank you for sharing.
Glad you enjoyed it, means a lot.
Much love, Anon.
Hey there !! Ejay here for a quick review.
. It's perfectly okay!!
To begin with, I liked your description in which you said that this was written during your chemistry class. I have done that myself, you see
Now, moving on to your poem:
It's a really nice one which has a really strong message. Your poem can soon become an inspiration for our YES readers who are going through a dark phase ( myself included )
Thanks for giving me the strength to believe.
Cheers !!
Thanks for the review and I really hope that this dark phase you're in is soon filled with light and love, you gots this, and I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Much love, Anon.