Hey it's Kat here to write a review for you,
I really liked this! You started off really strong and at first I didn't get the rhythm or here but after reading it I think it flows nicely. However you might want to consider revising the last two stanzas as I feel like they were rushed and don't quite mesh with the rest of your poem. I don't understand why you capabilities certain words in the middle of sentences either. It overall it was a nice read.
Thanks for asking me to review it and if you need anymore feed back on this or any other piece you know where to get me.
Kat
Points: 431
Reviews: 305
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