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The Sun Still Rises

by AngelLily

Sometimes I smile

It only lasts for a while

I'm feeling the pain

My heart's got a stain

Yeah, please don't go

I don't wanna be off on my own

I guess it's not my choice

But I'll still raise my voice

Sometimes I still feel you near

I forget you're not really here

And sometimes I cry

I cannot tell a lie

My brother, my friend

I'll see you again

This isn't the end

'Cause the sun still rises

It rises so high

We don't have to say goodbye

Wipe away my tears

Take away my tears

Yeah, I know that you're strong

And sometimes we didn't get along

Yet, I'd still play Legos

Yeah, I don't wanna let go

I liked when we'd act like psychos

And the little scrunch of your nose

Yeah, I loved when we were crazy

I won't let my memories go hazy

My brother, my friend

I'll see you again

This isn't the end

'Cause the sun still rises

It rises so high

We don't have to say goodbye

Wipe away my tears

Take away my tears

I'll try to hold on

Even though you are gone

You went home in a hurry

But I'll try not to worry

And when I get there

I'll ruffle your hair

And I'll see you smile

Then it'll be the end of my trial

My brother, my friend

I'll see you again

This isn't the end

'Cause the sun still rises

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Wed Sep 08, 2021 6:28 pm
Coffeeboyjay says...

my name jay and i im here to do a review

first: off this poem is pretty good and i would cry cause this poem reminds me of i im still raising and shining...

Second: this poems would make anybody in a good mood and make them still shine like i just saying...

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Fri Feb 12, 2021 8:54 pm
strangelyregular wrote a review...

First of all, I'd like to congratulate you for being brave enough to put something so personal to your life up on the Internet. This is clearly an incredibly heartfelt and emotional piece - I'd love to see what it sounds like sung. I do have one point of criticism, though. It sounds a bit overly adherent to its rhyming structure? Like, it's not bad, but I do think it could stand to get a bit out of that "smile/while, choice/voice, pain/stain" one-line-after-another structure. Maybe consider using a few more slant rhymes or structuring it as an ABAB or ABCB type thing rather than an AABB? (Again, I could be wrong, it's just a matter of personal preference.)

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Fri Feb 12, 2021 3:28 am
Elinor wrote a review...

Hey AngelLily!

Thank you for sharing these very sweet lyrics written in memory of your friend. I wonder if you're planning to set these to music eventually? I would love to hear what this sounds like set to music, or at the least, what you have planned for it.

My first comment is a small one. Because this isn't broken up into stanzas, it was a little bit harder for me to follow how you wanted the song to progress, if there was a chorus you wanted to anchor the rest of the piece. Usually, songs are about conveying a feeling, and I like how keep going back to this idea of the sun rising once again.

Anyway, you did a great job with this, and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with it. Hope this helps and happy writing!

All the best,

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Thu Feb 11, 2021 9:06 pm
MailicedeNamedy says...

It´s a beautiful song! I have experienced the same some years ago. Stay strong! :)

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Thu Feb 11, 2021 7:44 pm
illy7896 says...

This is such a nice song. I'm sorry for your loss. I hope you get through this

AngelLily says...

Thank you

Okay, first of all, who names their dinner? I don't want to know my dinner's name. This potato--is this potato named Steve?
— Rick Riordan, The Sword of Summer