Hi!
This is truly an amazing song, my only suggestion of improvement is with the line:
"You think you're so bold" you could possibly change it too:
"Your love's gone cold,
Memories and visions unfold,
"You're love's gone cold,
Is this the future they foretold?" - if you want to deliver a hardhitting and emotional impact - as i'm sure you intend too, with your song but other than that, it's brilliant!
Keep writing
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