Your love's gone cold
Now I've got no one to hold
You went with the stars
You left me with scars
Ooooh
Feeling helpless
Stuck in the deepness
I can't defeat this
Ooooh
Your love, yeah
Your love's gone cold
Your love, yeah
You think you're so bold
Your love, yeah
Your love's gone cold
Your love, yeah
You think you're so bold
I stay up all night
Tryin' to make it right
I'm feeling the fear
You left me here
Ooooh
Every day
I pray
For a better walk
Among this disarray
Your love, yeah
Your love's gone cold
Your love, yeah
You think you're so bold
Your love, yeah
Your love's gone cold
Your love, yeah
You think you're so bold
Your love's gone cold
Now I've got no one to hold
I just got sold
You left me for gold
Ooooh
Yeah...your love's gone cold
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Hi!
This is truly an amazing song, my only suggestion of improvement is with the line:
"You think you're so bold" you could possibly change it too:
"Your love's gone cold,
Memories and visions unfold,
"You're love's gone cold,
Is this the future they foretold?" - if you want to deliver a hardhitting and emotional impact - as i'm sure you intend too, with your song but other than that, it's brilliant!
Keep writing
HIYO! hailey here for a review! THis song is amazing! like honestly! I got chills reading it!
"I'm feeling the fear
You left me here"
This part had so many feelings running through me because of how you placed it in the song. Its so well put together. Its worded amazing and the emotions off of this is insane. I loved this and want to say thank you for writing this and having the courage to share it with YWS's community! thank you.
Nice lyrics......they are pretty meaningful......go ahead and make an actual song.............I really liked the following lines
"You went with the stars and left me with scars"
"Stuck in the deepness I can't defeat this"
❤❤