It's beautiful Apple!! - Kristen Danger
a broken heart is full of careless, thoughtless stitches
their personality is full of endlessly switching switches
their heart is full of holes and scars
embedded in their skin are painful, countless shards
be careful when handling this heart, as shapeless as it may be
it had no shape, too many holes and cuts to take form, you see?
new scars may cover the old
but every scar has a tale to be told
but no matter how many old scars get covered by the new
the blood that pours out will never subdue!
and endless ocean of tears, with blood raining across the sky
with a grief-filled voice screaming the thunderous words,
" why? why?! WHY!?”
the ocean of tears crashes against the land
carved from long-lost love by thy hand
on that island against the teary sea,
im pretty sure i see a sad face smiling at me
the flowers have wilted, the trees are dead
all that grey fills me with dread!
that person was gone. i blinks once, twice, thrice
to see them again would have been nice!
my own heart tightened with great sorrow
just then waves crashed so high, i don’t think i would see tomorrow!
but no matter the circumstances, ill handle this shapeless heart with great care
i will not ignore the scars that are there
pain was felt with every lash
as my own heart saddened another wave crashed
this hearts pain will not be forgotten
ill make sure of it, for it i have gotten!
"new scars may cover the old
but every scar has a tale to be told
but no matter how many old scars get covered by the new
the blood that pours out will never subdue!" - Relatable.
I really like how you write. There is a sense of calmness and I enjoyed reading this poem. I really really think you should continue writing poetry. Thank you 
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It's a really beautiful poem and has great metaphors and feelings. I love your take on the feeling of a broken heart. It is edgy and affecting, in a way the lines make you feel things and feelings that are very vulnerable. The pain of old scars, old memories, and past relations do get covered but never forgotten. I loved the thoughts and pretty much everything. The loss of something or someone, most probably someone is what I am left feeling lingering in my mind after reading this. You said times have been tough for you, I hope things work out for you soon and you find strength<33
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A broken heart is full of careless, thoughtless stitches
their personality is full of endlessly switching switches
new scars may cover the old
but every scar has a tale to be told
Hello Hello I hope you dont mind me coming in with a little review. I think you did a good job here I enjoy seeing the rhyme scheme start to unfold. The theme is very relatable as I think everyone has been hurt by someone they cared about at one point or another I also tend to be stuck in the past. I feel you also got the emotions across with the imagery in a nice neat manner however there are a few things I want to point out. Do keep in mind these are just my opinions and by no means need to be taken into account.
Firstly I would capitalize the I's to give it a more polished personal feel this is more a nitpick of mine so feel free to ignore that.
Secondly In this line " their personality is full of endlessly switching switches" switching switches feels a bit redundant perhaps flickering or flipping would work better.
Overall It's a solid piece keep it up and go drink some water!
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