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You talk so dirty, but you love so sweet
quit throwin’ flowers at my feet
I’m with someone new, so just subdue
I’ll be here forever, ever, ever
~
Yeah, late at night sittin’ tight, askin’ you if you feel alright, you tell me to go away, but I want to stay, you put your hands on me, but that ain’t how it works no more, now you have no choice to watch me wall out that door, but . . .
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Roses on my bed, seeds in my hair
Sunflower petals, too many to bear
Don’t care for apples, but I like flowers
But I have to say never, ever, ever
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Keep talkin’ to me nasty, your emotions change so vastly, you only know me by the way I just “let it go” but that ain’t me, and it’ll soon be to the point where you see, but I know . . .
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Your heart got thorns, your lips cover teeth
Bite me hard, it’s what’s underneath
I’ll cut em off, but I have another love
I want her, want her, want her (a̶n̶d̶ y̶o̶u̶)
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You’re too late now, I belong to someone else, no, my love for her ain’t false, you think that and I’ll sock you, but I don’t know what to do, I love her, but I love you too, I don’t want two, but I want you, and I’ve had enough of new . . .
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She’s with me, but your wax be on my heart
Pain so fun to watch, it’ll all fall apart
Don’t need to replace, you’re the one who wanted space
NOW you love me? Alright, fine, fine, fine
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You pull away from me and expect me to let it go as always? I think about you, at home, outside, in school hallways, I know I shouldn’t, I think of her too, But I know that my heart belongs to you, I don’t want to split it, I don’t want to choose, if I keep my feelings under lock and key, I know there’s nothing for me to lose!
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Back and forth, swear to God it’s a switch
We can’t love at the same time, what a bitch
Never had dragon fruit, but I’ve had a rose thats rude
Don’t you ever, ever ever let go
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My God, my love for you faded, and I fell for her quick, but you suddenly tell me you love me? It’s making me sick, but not in a bad way, I just want you both to stay, okay? Can it be that way forever? I don’t want to sever! I can’t be with you while I’m with her, alright? You made your bed, now you have no choice but to sit tight.
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I’ll love you but then you won’t love me
As soon as I stop, you’re back to “it’s meant to be!”
Arguing all night, then we hold each other tight
You’re just my type, my type, my type, alright!?
~
I’ll never get with you. I’ve decided. My heart will belong to her, but I’ll keep you close, because you’re the one who knows me the most. Don’t let it get into your head, remember, the words “I love you platonically" were once said, and they were said by none other than you, so I gave up on you and went for her, and maybe that’s better, I don’t know, but we’re done, we’re through, but by my side is where I want you.
~
You talk so dirty, but you love so sweet
quit throwin’ flowers at my feet
I’m with someone new, so just subdue
I’ll be here forever, ever, ever
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Hey friend, Ellie here to leave a quick review on this lovely poem of yours! Let's jump right in!
First of all, I love the unique formatting you use. IU enjoyed how you switched between a tradition verse style to more of prose and sentences. Very unique and lovely! You have a cool rhyme scheme too. Your first and second lines of every stanza rhyme.
This pome touches on love and relationships. Perhaps, you have found someone new so this poem is about the feelings an old partner may still have for you. It feels like a letter to them, perhaps.
This feels very relaxed. Almost like it could be a rap, if that makes sense. It feels like very honest thoughts, perhaps written in a moment of strong emotions and overwhelming feelings that you needed to get onto the page.
Interesting use of brackets and a strikethrough. To me, brackets represent internal dialogue or thoughts. The strike though is something that you don't want to be seen or heard. So it is almost as if these are thoughts you refuse to dwell on and refuse to share with anyone else, that you still want to get back with this other person, despite also wanting the other girl.
I liked how you restated your first lines again at the end. That gives it a good full circle feeling. Thanks for sharing this poem!
Your friend,
Ellie
This is a lovely poem written by the author.
"You talk so dirty, but you love so sweet
quit throwin’ flowers at my feet
I’m with someone new, so just subdue
I’ll be here forever, ever, ever."
Love is an amazing feeling. Love associates two souls everlasting and makes the world a beautiful spot for them.
This poem about two lovers and their love is well described by the author, each and every paragraph tells the readers how divine and delicate the matter of love is.
Nicely done.
Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.
Nice poem. Recognizable tone and theme.
However, some imagery or vivid scenarios would help build on how well the poem will grip the reader's attention.
How does he/she talk dirty?
How do they love sweetly?
fair point! but the whole idea is to be vague. thanks for the feedback!
although, might I remind you, multiple examples are put in there, she talks dirty with the arguing and nasty words, but she loves sweetly with flowers and "I love you"s.