What can you do?

Thank you for the writing this. It really made my day.
I’d just like to drop by for a review, sharing my thoughts on this poem.
I like the feeling of it, but to me it didn’t really feel poetic. More like a story, or even a group of sentences slotted together to sound nice.
Also, the swearing seemed out of place. I know it was a high rated poem, but the concept of the poem didn’t, to me, include swearing. That’s why it just felt out of place.
I would recommend that you go through the poem and make the lines more poetic, for example making the lines shorter. I would also change the swearing, or even take it out completely.
Overall, I really liked the concept of the poem. Well done and I hope this helps.

Radrook here a once again to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if i offend. It isn’t my intention.
Please feel full free to cast aside all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true by being extra careful.

That having been said:

Thanks for sharing this composition concerning the feeling helplessness during a moment when a loved one needs help. I like the way that the composition is conversational. As if the speaker is confiding this to me personally. Also I can feel the strong emotion that the writing is experiencing and his sense of deep frustration in not being able to be of assistance. Definitely a very intense read.

As a fellow human being who has undergone that identical experience, I can definitely empathize and share those sentiments and wish as fervently as he does that things were different. So it isn't from an aloof distance that I am considering the things being described but as one who knows personally the depths of bitter despair that such feelings can engender. After all, I watched my mother slowly succumb to Alzheimer's for almost three years until she could barely talk. It is called The Long Goodbye and helplessness is the main feeling involved for the one observing it.

However, since this is a request to examine a written composition, I will provide my feedback with the sole intention of helping. So my statements below should be understood within this context.


Suggestion

Perhaps “you” might not be the best choice. It might be understood to be assuming that everyone shares the writer’s sentiments and clearly not everyone does.

For example, the following statement isn’t accurate:
. . . . no one likes feeling helpless in any kind of situation.

There are people who are masochists who derive great satisfaction in feeling helpless.
Others enjoy the bondage type scenario during intimacy.

Also, not everyone feels like a fraud when promising to help others with the words you mention.

Punctuation

Of course......
[Of course . . . or Of course,]

Concerning the use of Elipses
https://www.writing-skills.com/five-ann ... e-ellipsis

[Five periods are never used. The max is four.]


Sentence fragments

[y]ou want to know that they are okay.

[t]hat they are safe and secure and happy.

[t]here will be times in life,

. . . . won't go away[] [n]o matter how hard you try.
. . . . becomes even more unbearable than it was before. [redundancy]
[. . . . becomes even more unbearable. ]

Very interesting read. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

This is beautiful. The raw emotion in it. I can hear your voice through the broken words. It doesn't sound super poetic, but that is what makes it so beautiful. It's not perfect, but that is what makes this raw and tragic. You bring up these emotions and, honestly I'm not sure what to call it, but it's uncomfortable. So thank you. I think it's important that as a society we are uncomfortable because that's how we grow. And I love what you wrote because it strikes a conversation. This is honestly beautiful. Hang in there. xx