Young Writers Society

Hello there!
I will be reviewing for you tonight.. I'm not a poet myself, so I can't offer you much expertees, but I can tell you what I found good or less good.

First off, the title. I must say, it intrigued me at the first glance, and I was thrilled to see it was not a metaphor. I don't read much poetry, but I haven't came across this kind of poem so far, and I like to like my firsts xD

I grow fond of the Cane, as if it's a person, a character in a story, someone I might talk to. I love the words you used, the style figures, and the way you seemed to get into Cane's character, not quite giving it emotions yet making the readers sympathetic towards it, huh.

Decorated with feathers,
It is a rite of passage.
A weapon of aggression.
An escort for protection.

Hallo there, I'm here to review your poem for you today. (The title certainly drew me in.)

When reading this poem, the thing that stood out the most was the figurative language. Your usage of it was excellent and certainly helped convey your ideas in an interesting and splendid manner. The simile I like the most was this one "Tall and rounded like a noble flamingo,". It certainly made me laugh as it isn't often that you see something compared to a flamingo.

You flow is rather neat, though it is obvious that it isn't an important part of this poem. I also have no qualms about your grammar. Your grammar style is nice and consistent, and rather clean. It neatly matches the overall style of the poem which certainly is a good thing.

My favourite stanza is as such.

"It is polished cherry wood floor
To hospital kitchen counter steel.
A symbol of the gentleman
An elegant dancing partner."

Though, I did at first find the last line of that stanza rather curious. Though, with a bit of thought I figured out what it means. (For some poems, the whole point of certain wordings is to make the reader stop and really think about what it means.)

In the fourth stanza, I liked how you mentioned it as a weapon. That made me laugh at the thought of an old man shaking it at some rowdy kids to get off his lawn.

I certainly also like the final stanza and how you pair it with different ideals in old age. Such as how it is more hopeful than a wheelchair. Though most of all, I like how you brought it down to a simple stroll in the morning.

So, as always, keep writing! I hope to read some more of your works soon.
- noninjaspresent >(> ==)>*

Hello my name is Kyla, and I'm here to leave you a review.

I haven't heard one like this before, but I really enjoyed reading. I think it needed some commas, but it still flowed quite smoothly. I found it entertaining when you mentioned "A weapon of aggression. An escort for protection". I also really like "A symbol of the gentleman An elegant dancing partner". I definitely agree with it though, it holds the truth.

I love how it is straight forward; You made your point. I love how it is described. Even though I'm just in high school, my opinion might not be of much interest to others but I still enjoyed your poem.