YES YES YES
Before you read this I need to say that I can't take full credit for verse one and three. They were based on a parody from *drum roll* Tumblr, but I changed the words up in them (I did try to link the original but I couldn't find it, sorry!). Oh, and hopefully you know this already, but the original song is My Favourite Things from The Sound of Music.
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Trenchcoats on timelords and humans in jumpers.
White deadly daleks and sonic screwdrivers.
Empty blue journals all tied up with string.
These are a few of my favourite things.
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Dollop head princes and ridd-le-ing dragons.
Dark kingdoms, brave knights and Merlin in taverns.
Sisters and druids trying to kill kings.
These are a few of my favourite things.
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Consulting detectives beside army doctors.
Deductions, tea, phone calls, Miss Adler and bombers.
Rain drops and murders then Jimmy's phone rings.
These are a few of my favourite things.
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When Moffat strikes,
When real life stings,
When I'm hit by feels,
I simply remember my favourite things,
And then I don't feel so bad.
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Blacks robes on students and death eaters calling.
Using time turners to keep up with schooling.
Hogwarts and wizards and brooms tied with string.
These are a few of my favourite things.
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Half fangs and full bloods and bad aiming slayers,.
Blood banks and sharp fangs and bats and chess players.
Strangers and siblings wishing to be king.
These are a few of my favourites things.
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Tributes in dresses and skilled Herondales.
Dauntless cake, Fourtris and factions that failed.
Sword pens and Valdez and sirens that sing.
These are a few of my favourite things.
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When mundanes bite,
When my ship sinks,
When I'm hit by feels,
I simply remember my favourite things,
And then I don't feel so bad.
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The fandoms I used:
Verse 1: Doctor Who
Verse 2: Merlin
Verse 3: Sherlock (BBC)
Verse 4: Harry Potter
Verse 5: Young Dracula (CBBC)
Verse 6: Hunger Games, The Mortal Instruments, Divergent and Percy Jackson.
I love this.
The second time I read it, since I watched the Sound of Music. I love this.
The awesomeness of this ALMOST makes up for your Dramione avatar. (I can't stand Draco, and I love Hermione to death.)
Next time my ship sinks, this will be one of the favorite things I will remember, and then I won't feeeeeeel sooo baaaaaaaad. (Yeah, I sang the song while reading this...)
I. LOVE. THIS. SO. MUCH. *involuntarily cries a little* Don't know what Merlin, Young Dracula, or the Mortal Instruments are, but I don't care. It's-- It's just so BEAUTIFUL.
If YWS had a "LOVE" button, I would "LOVE" this song.
Hey,
This is really cute! I really enjoy both The Sound of Music and My Favorite Things as a song, and I thought did a really good job of portraying all of the different fandoms you like while still keeping true to the spirit of the song. I understood the references to the randoms I was familiar with, and obviously I didn't understand the ones I was not familiar with. Just a note, though! I wouldn't include the explanation of the different fandoms at the end. You should let the lyrics speak for themselves, and people are either going to get the references or they won't. Just a note that I've found has improved my own writing, and I think it will for you, too.
A few specific comments:
Sisters and druids trying to kill kings.
Empty blue journals all tied up with string.
Hello.
You did a good job capturing fandoms, however some of your lines really stick out as having bad flow. One in particular was:
Sisters and druids trying to kill kings.
LOvE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!! You love PercyJackson, right? I do too. I am fangirling!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hello, Dracula! I'm here to review this piece, uh, obviously.
I'd like to say that I'm mildly pleased you didn't force a complete rhyme in the verses where it didn't fit, because too often do I see people who force words that don't sound right next to words that so clearly fit well in context. Also, as a blogger, I do love the references you used, and they sound like things that people in these fandoms would actually discuss should they burst into impromptu Sound-of-Music-style song.
I definitely enjoy your interpretation of this song, as a fan of the Sound of Music and a musician myself, and I found myself humming along as I read - that being said, I think this would sound better sung than it looks on paper, because some of the syllabic stresses are off with the stresses that are usually in the words you used, and I think it would make more sense if one heard it than read it. If I had to make a critique, I would say that I really do not like the line "when I'm having feels" - it sounds very forced, and very childish, and I think it could be replaced with something much better when it comes down to it. In general, most people in fandoms are not reduced to squalling children when they get emotional, and I don't think they would like the implication that they do.
In any case, though, I do think it's quite clever, and I appreciate the references you've tossed together in this melting pot of cool. Keep it up!
Hey Jazzydracula! 
This was really fun! And wow - you like a lot of things 
Ooh, before I go on, if you remember/can find out who did the two verses (since you said you saw them on Tumblr?) it might be a good idea to link their Tumblr here or something, just to make sure that there is no trouble. 
However, taking inspiration is always allowed!
You kept the original rhythm of the song really well (yes, I sang the whole song out loud to check that), which is great! Your rhymes worked surprisingly well with all the fandoms although you used a lot of the same words (king, sing, string). Maybe one of my few criticisms would be to try to mix it up a little so you have more rhymes for "things" and you don't have to use the same ones. A good example of that are the Doctor Who and Harry Potter verses where you use "tied (up) with string", which sound a bit repetitive because of that.
I also really liked the Tumblr "references" especially in the chorus bits, like "feels" and "when my ship sinks" - hilarious! However, perhaps you can work on those verses rhyming as well so you don't have "feels" with "bad".
All in all though, this was really fun and a nice start to my morning. Hope you have a nice day!
Demeter
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Before I write this, I understand it's supposed to be satirical but why would a mundane bite? Surely that would be a um, I don't know, vampire? You could say, "When Camille bites" perhaps?
Anyway, hurray for fandoms! I didn't notice the Young Dracula one until you listed it as a fandom at the end. I used to LOVE that show. I liked how some of the references were sheer name drops and others were very subtle like "Sisters and Druids trying to kill Kings". For Merlinian, this easily brings to mind Morgana and Mordred (how awesome is Alex Vlahos btw) but for others it sounds like a fairly typical Celtic occurrence and kind of like you are reminiscing about the glory days.
My favourite line is easily "When Moffat strikes".
Moffat. MOFFAT.
Also, the rhythm works perfectly!
Well done
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