Hello there
Such a nice poem, even if it's short.
At first when I started reading, I thought that there are no rhyming verses/words, but when I continued, I found the rhymes, which in my opinion, a rhyming poem makes it look more enjoyable to read.
Your poem looks like a "whole stanza" (paragraph). I would suggest that when you write another poem, keep in mind to divide it into stanzas. That way, the readers won't feel like they have to read it fast, but it will help them reflect more between stanzas.
On the whole, keep on writing!
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