Hi there! Noir here, and I'll be your reviewer today. Let's rock!
Concept: I loved this concept. It's very cool and it's very thought provoking. It pretty much sums myself up and the title intrigued me. "Creating you own philosophy" is what I've done my whole life. Thumbs up.
Structure: Couplets. I love them. I love reading them. I love writing them. I love everything to do with them. The end words you used matched each other nicely and it gave it a very quaint feel. Thumbs up.
Rhythm: Okay, here's where I have to kinda knock the poem. In a couple of areas there were places where the couplets beat threw each other off.
"Words scattered can never be collected--
So your diction of words for it's usage can be mightily selected." This couplet is out of balance, so either extending the first or shortening the second would help that.
Overall, the rhythm was okay. :I
Final verdict: Great. Rhythm issues aside, you have a fantastic poem here. Some touch ups and you'd be set.
This has been NoirLumiere, and there's your review. Good night and keep rocking!
Points: 1990
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