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My name is Quest and I will be reviewing this poem for you today! So without further ado, let's begin this, shall I?
First off, I want to say that I vaguely remember the song your poem is based off of, but not all that much, so if my review conflicts with what you wanted as a result of the basis, then I apologize. However, I will review it anyway, so bear with me.
And by erupting suddenly, and break the silence.
You don't really need the 'and' between 'suddenly' and 'break', it makes the first sentence a fragment, and it doesn't go together.
That’s what makes the theory tiresome.
Hmm, what theory? I know that you might be putting in words just to match the first song, but if it doesn't make sense, then don't do it. Many a poet has made this mistake.
Well, I quite like this poem, although I do have a nitpick, which isn't a bad thing, really, I have done it before myself, but still I will say it.
This poem, although having a small theme to it, doesn't stay by it. There are a lot of weird adverb usage in this poem that just makes it hard to read and hard to understand. This isn't bad, not at all, but you should stay weary of that when you make another poem.
And I do encourage you to make another poem. This one is quite good! Keep on writing!
Hope this helped,
Quest
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