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Hey again FarDusk!
if you look too hard
> I like the lines:
It makes me think of a contrast between the natural and artificial, showing how the doors really don't belong to the rest of the landscape. Maybe they have no history or have an 'alien' origin.
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This is a really cool poem! It felt like the image of the painting was unfolding with each line and the twist that the whole room is upside down in the end is really impactful. I may be reading too much into this, but I feel like it conveys this sense of how when something is wrong, we may fixate on tiny details that are off, but when we think about them there is a larger problem so "correcting" the small things is almost misleading.
rooted and transient
This poem feels quietly evocative, hinting at a story that isn't spelt outright. My interpretation is that the "you" knew that house once and had some kind of significant history in it. Maybe a friend lived there, or it was their home at some point. But the final stanza constructs how fleeting such important time periods can be, showing how it has been consumed by overgrowth and time and also that the speaker and the "you" drive past it in an instant.
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I like the lines:
It makes me think of a greyscale, fuzzy image.
if you look too hard
> I like the lines:
they were set there,
not grown there
It makes me think of a contrast between the natural and artificial, showing how the doors really don't belong to the rest of the landscape. Maybe they have no history or have an 'alien' origin.
off twice
This is a really cool poem! It felt like the image of the painting was unfolding with each line and the twist that the whole room is upside down in the end is really impactful. I may be reading too much into this, but I feel like it conveys this sense of how when something is wrong, we may fixate on tiny details that are off, but when we think about them there is a larger problem so "correcting" the small things is almost misleading.
rooted and transient
This poem feels quietly evocative, hinting at a story that isn't spelt outright. My interpretation is that the "you" knew that house once and had some kind of significant history in it. Maybe a friend lived there, or it was their home at some point. But the final stanza constructs how fleeting such important time periods can be, showing how it has been consumed by overgrowth and time and also that the speaker and the "you" drive past it in an instant.
low battery
I like the lines:
the colors seem
to have lost their names,
It makes me think of a greyscale, fuzzy image.
