Love the imagery, Buranko! "frost withers" is shivery in a good way, and "burn the milky winter light" is such an intense picture! Great start to your NaPo
Your second poem is interesting and mysterious. It makes me wonder how the speaker is connected to the toothfairy, and what those notes are about. I also really like the expressiveness of the third poem, it really feels to me like there's a sense of surrender in the 'poem's' expression.
You've got great succinctness + use of word-economy in these Buranko; I'd love to see some more! Your third poem was probably my favorite here - I think it can be so easy for a poem about a poem to turn into something very cliche but you did a nice job making the poem feel like a beautiful little moment unfolding as each line opened up; and the final line ending in just "Light" I thought was a good way to close it out. Good luck in future writing! <3
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The most important thing is to preserve the world we live in. Unless people understand and learn about our world, habitats, and animals, they won't understand that if we don't protect those habitats, we'll eventually destroy ourselves. — Jack Hanna
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