Hi, i like this setup of packages hehe, if you're still running these would you mind performing a Quick Critique on the below link please, much appreciated if you could spare the time, warning; for 1 chapter its rather lengthy. like i have mentioned in other threads, i am trying to get a couple of reviews just in the case that there are some things that one may not pick up on when the other doesn't, but i'm not saying i doubt your wisdom
Not many remember how life there began, in the lands amidst surrounding walls of stone and pools of deep darkness, but whilst they forget the secrets of the past, they begin to riddle the future with their growing lust for knowledge, greatness and power.
Oh i completely understand! don't worry about that, if i'm not careful this story will corrupt my own school life anyway hehe, thanks! take as long as you like, school comes first!
Not many remember how life there began, in the lands amidst surrounding walls of stone and pools of deep darkness, but whilst they forget the secrets of the past, they begin to riddle the future with their growing lust for knowledge, greatness and power.
It's been up for several days and I was hoping to get some feedback on it since it's different than anything I've ever written before. Alas, I've gotten no reviews (surprise, surprise). I would appreciate a Quick Critique very much whenever you have time. And I will be more than willing to review any of your pieces in return. Just paste a link at the end of your review if you have anything specific you'd like reviewed. Thank you so much in advance!
~Jess
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“The circus arrives without warning. No announcements precede it. It is simply there, When yesterday it was not.”
Thanks for reviewing my sci-fi novel. I am planning to edit it, so the grammar stuff is very useful. I don't want to take up too much of your time, but do you have any other thoughts about character description? I know what I want them to be like, but I skipped over them because after another chapter or two, they never appear again. Do you think it's still worth it to go into detail on them? Thanks for your input.
Hai! I'm a pretty amateur writer, and gets most of my learning from Honors English classes. Sooo, Quick Critique for any or maybe all chapters of Queen of the Robots, since that is my favorite. <3 Point outs and Quick Critiques for Natural Dancing and El Piggo and the Swine Flu. (For Pig Contest). Thanks so much! ^.^ Love this!
“There’s no point in being grown up if you can’t act a little childish sometimes.”-The Fourth Doctor "Who I was, what I did, that's not who I am." - Castiel "Friends protect you." - John Watson
'Ello, just saw your reply on my wall, i 'think' and i mean 'think' my story is ready for reviewing, if you could give me an analysis of characters and plot that would be great as i haven't got jkuch of a review on that side of things, excuse any gramatical mistakes because i know they're there, they're just hiding
anyway any feedback in any time would be greatly valued
Not many remember how life there began, in the lands amidst surrounding walls of stone and pools of deep darkness, but whilst they forget the secrets of the past, they begin to riddle the future with their growing lust for knowledge, greatness and power.
hehe, thanks! take as long as you like, school comes first! 
