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Alfred Symon's Critic Clinic: Bringing Smiles since the 60's

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Wario! Your Quick Critique is done! Sorry for the delay, but I'm sure it's the best I can give!

Next up, DG and BC!
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Black Chaos!!!!

The patient survived the operation! Congrats! I hope I helped!

Next up, DG!
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Hello! I was wondering if you could critique my NEWWW and improved Prologue for Keychain Magic which I have worked very hard on in updating. Thank you!

Here's the link:
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Sorry, my Dear MM, but we have a short delay. Elections are coming, see. Just you wait and this patient is good to go!
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MM! More delay coming! Please be patient! I'm sorry for all the trouble, but it's not gonna be this week. Maybe the next!
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The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

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The Clinic is now back! MM, your patient have survived! New patients welcome!
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The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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hi! um could you review my story please. i shortened my first chapter into half.
i don't think its a good start so i would like others review(tired of beging my younger siblings to read it.younger! they never read it)
i suck at the begining please help point out what mmy problems are.thanks
work.php?id=93995

if you review poetry(i forgot what you wrote on the first page) please review the one whose link is shown below.

thanks a bunch!
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Of course! I'll have two patients in one! Oh, and I'll also give them a simple Point Out, by the way, since you've mentioned the word in your request :D
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Zohali! Your story patient is finished! Only left out is the poem! :)
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Hey, this looks like a cool place. :D
Do you mind reviewing a (somewhat long) short story of mine? It's been up a super long time, but people appear to be afraid of it due to the length. Also, feel free to be as harsh as you like!

work.php?id=91104

THANK YOU! :D
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But of course, Devan! No length is long or short in the world of literature! Sure!
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The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

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Devan!!!! The patient has survived! Great piece, by the way!
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The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

"Stories are like yarn; just hold on to the tip and let the ball roll away"




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Hello! I just posted my first piece recently, and I was wondering if you'd have time to do a Quick Critique. It's just a novel I'm writing for fun, but feedback is always nice. Here it is: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=94160

I will pay with a review of my own, if you'd like. Thanks in advance!
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Of course, Siderea! Your doctor is IN! :) About the review deal, well lemme think about it... I always want to get a hands on my patient first :D
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The Tatterdemalion takes a tattle!

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OK, thanks!
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