Booty Shorts

I also think the 'black woman attitude' bit is offensive.

"Black woman Attitude" is the name of the file, my dear. ( note the ".jpg" at the end.)
It can't be removed.
I'm black- and I'm not offended.

Anywho, sorry if I seemed rude or harsh, but, put simply, I just didn't like it much.

Don't apologize for the review, at all. You made an effort. That's good.
( I gave you a 'harsh' review on a poem you did not too long ago- so don't be too worried, lol)
So thanks for the input, nonetheless.


-Jojo

Hilarious!!!! I found this genuinely funny and extremely refreshing. You put what everyone is thinking into a great snappy poem. Very nice job. I totally agree with the message you're sending with this poem. You deserve every 'like' you got and you will most defiantly be getting one from me, I just wish there was a 'love' button!!!
Keep up the good writing ~Dragongirl

Dude. Best. Ever. Love it!

HAHA!!! I thought this was hilarious!!! And of someone who sees this all the time in my school, i can totally relate. But i don't wear those types of clothing myself. My mother would kill me XD Good luck and Keep Writing!!!

Qoh16

I loved the message and how you incorporated humor in the poem. It was well written, or at least some of it was. Some lines sounded a little forced, but it was really great overall. Your use of rhymes was great. My favorite line of the poem was:

I know that you want to keep up with the "style",
but those are a size six.. and it's been a while...

I loved it. Keep up the good work. Just one last quick question. Where is the like button?

This poem is so friggin great. It is great. I can see what annapapadimitriou123 was saying, but I seriously think that girls who wear those shorts are wearing them for all the wrong reasons and desperately need to read this poem to set them straight. I mean, between attracting all the wrong guys, alienating and disgusting girls (people of your own gender), and just plain over-exposing your own body, you'd think girls would kind of stop wearing those stupid things. The booty shorts, I mean. They make shorts that are between butt cleavage and knee lengths okay, ladies? It's not like this is your only option -- you can still show off your sexy legs without practically mooning everyone walking behind you.

Anyway. I really didn't think I was that passionate about this issue until I read your awesome poem haha.

One little nitpick I had was that I felt like the rhythm was a little odd sometimes, like if you had dropped a word from a line it would have flowed better. Here's an example:

The fact that you love them, or the fact that I hate them?
We'd all be better off if you just burned them or ate them

I think this would have read a lot better if you'd left out the bolded word. Otherwise it's kind of stilted sounding.

I loved the rhymes, made me smile. Because the message is true down to the grain, or the atom, or whatever. I love it, like it, keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Loved this poem, it was a very creative way to rant. Yet it was poetic and beautiful Haha I'm not going to say that I've never worn short shorts but definitely never in public Thanks for posting, this piece made me laugh!
Peace,
Snickerdooly

I love this poem. It is so funny yet so true.

Hi,

Personally, while I find this somewhat true and relateable, I find this very rude and offensive. I think mayne you should have worded it differently. While I am not overweight, I do know there are probably some overweight women who hav more than likely read this and might have been offended. Although, that's just my thoughts. Otherwise, i think you wrote this considerably well. Good job.

Farewell,
A.

LOL. Hilarious I love it

*Laughs and smiles* I love this poem. You've relayed a message some people need to know in a hilarious way. Keep up the great work. You are really talented!

I completely agree with the message you have encoded.
Nice poem, it made me laugh...and think of a few people as well.

-Brie

Great poem, JoJo. Definitely one of the best and funnies poems I have ever have read.The message of the poem couldn't be truer. Great job and keep it up.