Booty Shorts

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I agree with MeanMrMustard and BehindTheMask here. The rhymes are forced, the spoilers are damn unnecissary (excuse my french) and the viewpoint is notonly offensivly controversial but moot point. Whoo hoo, you think booty shorts suck. Great for you. I know we have freedom of speech but is there really a point to this poem? Im especially not fond of your comments on things like cellulite aand dry skin. Who are you to judge? I bet you got yourself some cellulite and dry skin to. I mean, this isnt even about hating booty shorts. This is about hating those who wear them. So what? Are YOU the one wearing them? Get over it. Hate to say it, but i know women who use booty shorts for buisness. To make a freaking living. You know othat is? Hookers, strippers, and prostitutes. And you cant judge them either. Some women are forced to do it, and if they dojt make the money they get beat. All in all, your poem was shallow. Lacking. Certainly not insightful. And the rhyming is way to forced, which emphadises the blunt flatness. Soorrrrry. I hate it.

And who are you to make a poem based entirely on opinion then tell us we cant put our own? Sounds downright hypocritical.
"And when you're out there,
without care, yeah,
I was out of touch!
But it wasn't because I didn't know enough,
I just knew too much."




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Thanks for your vented viewpoint.
I understand your distress, but don't let it bother you so much.
( calm down, breathe, dear don't hurt yourself.)
Life goes on!

Cheer up;)
Thanks!
Last edited by XxMattxX on Sat Jun 18, 2011 4:44 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Well, It's been about 3-4 days, and this has gone really well!
Thank you all for your input, and for all of the support/likes.
Really appreciated!
But I think I should lock this, considering that it has over 60 comments, so other stuff can be reviewed, viewed, and featured. Most of the stuff I hear in regards to improvement are just repetitions of past reviews, and seeing as I won't really alter anything else, I should wrap this up.
Thanks!

-Jojo
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