Feed The Pink Elephant! [Open!]

Hey! I have gotten reviews on this but I need someone to tell me if I have made my story better. I know you haven't read my first draft but just tell me what you think of this draft.

General Fiction
Gaurdian Angel
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post767854.html#p767854

Thanks

megsug-Done!
Thank you for the request

Anymore?

Hey Pink
The Masquerader in General Fiction Novels, please.
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I have a poem. topic70588.html

Megsug-Done!
Flower~child-Done!

^^

Hey Pink.

We here-again! Would you mind reviewing this for us when you're free? Thanks a lot in advance and your reviews help a lot.

~BlueShubs

Here's one when you're free:

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Thanks in advance!

TIGERSPRITE

Hey there Pink, mind giving this a review?

Eventide, Chapter One It's in fantasy novels.

Thanks very much!

-Lauren-

BlueShubs-Done!
Flower~Child-Done!
Lauren- Done!

Thank for the request guys :3
I hope I helped ^^

Hi Shear!
Could you review my newest story Ash for me? Thanks!

Hey, hey, hey Pink!!!

Can you pwease review my Chapter 2 of The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer.

post777155.html - Chapter 2 - Part 1



Thanks 8D

P.S. I kind of revise it-- kind of. I fix some of my mistakes (like the ED and stuff) but I still haven't gotten the words :L

Need a review for my poem- Memory of You
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Hey! You're so nice for doing this.

Could you take a look at my novella? I'd greatly appreciate feedback. The first chapter is a little choppy, flow-wise, but after that it smoothes out.

Title: Captive
Genre: Historical/Romance
Summary: In the cold, isolated forests of 16th-century Europe, a lord takes a boy prisoner. As an unexpectedly tender relationship develops between captor and captive, resentment and distrust grow into warmth and trust in a pair of hearts that were once achingly empty. It aims to be a sensitive portrayal of a tender, if fragile, relationship that grows between two characters because of mutual loneliness as well as an intense longing for companionship. As a tentative trust develops between the two characters, the dynamics of their captor-captive relationship continually change as power is given, taken, and shared. As their bond deepens, the boy finds a new kind of freedom in his captivity and the man finds redemption for a brutal crime he committed.

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Thank you!

Hi, Ate Pink...review request pls. =))

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