Reviews from a Marine (Re-opened)

I'm, like, back? Any requests?

Please review this for me:

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Done!

~Amy

Hey Amy, it's me again I've taken on board all that you've said and have went back and re-written my previous chapters and have now posted up chapter 8. Hope you can take a look at it when you can and give me your opinion on the improvements. Thanks so much x

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic56650.html chapter 8

*coco

Mind reviewing mine?

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thanks!

Hi!

Any chance you could review my Historical fiction Novel start? It's the Reg Carter series. It's only 3 chapters long at the moment, but, hopefull I'll get 4 and 5 done by next week as I haven't got much on my plate!

Criticisms and Ratings very welcome!
Ben

Hey Aqua! It's me again.
Do you think you can review chapter 7 of Thorns & Roses?
Whenever you have time
Thanks again!

~Pink

Sho thang. Ben, I'm so sorry about yours, I totally forgot! Both will be done tonight!

Hi Aqua. Can I has review? :D My piece Fate (An Interpretation into English) is feeling quite unloved in the Lyrics section.

Hey! New guy here haha. Anyways I would very much like a review. Link to my story is in my sig.

All done! *flops*

Hi will you review a poem of mine its called Monster Love. Im eager to see what others think of it. if you can id be grateful.

Hey there Amy!
Me again! XD

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Right, this piece has already been nit-picked and pulled apart but feel free to extend on this if you see anything because its important I constantly improve this book! Any'oo what is it? It's an extract from my column-based book and this particular piece is about Indian food.

What would be really helpful is if you could review the humour and style as well as any content suggestions! That would be FAB! Cheers again!
Ben.

Done!

This is only my second poem and i would love for some reviews on it

Please and thank you:
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