The Rebellion

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Should we open the storybook for people who want to create some of Kenzel's followers?

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EDIT: I took out the bad part.

Eden

I had to get Ebba to Jarin as quick as possible. "What size are Jarin's feet exactly?" She looked surprised and confused but answered.

"About twice the size of mine, I think. Why is this important?"

"I can track him, so I need to know what shape his feet are." I looked around a few minutes before I found it. "Follow me." We walked quickly through the forest in silence.

"I cannot believe you can track."

Ebba looked from him to me. "Can everybody do it?"

"Oh, no, Princess Ebba. It is a lost art form. Some assassins could do it, but they do not have the right teacher. Would you teach me, Eden?"

"When Ebba is with Jarin."


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Jarin was with about three other people, did you account for that? They wont be leaving him, at least not Aliya and its not likely Adam and Revelon will be easily lost either
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Wait...I thought he was with that Revlon(spelling?) guy. Shoot. Should I just delete my last post?

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Guys, just to let you know - we have a DT - And moon jumper, you don't have to delete - just edit -
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**(Also the three of them don't have horses. I was hoping to grab Jarin's horse in the next post. His name is Jakkin. ;))
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**Right, well, it was a mess-up, but we can't let that ruin the storybook... Moon jumper, I'm going to go from when Eden says "When Ebba is with Jarin." I think we could definitely use everything that comes before that sentence - Hope that is okay, but I don't want this storybook to die - **

Ebba

"When Ebba is with Jarin," said Eden smartly.

"Of course," said Acenon. He seemed to be slightly embarrassed that he hadn't said the same thing himself. Turning to Ebba, he continued, "Where was Jarin last time you saw him?"

"At camp," said Ebba quickly. "But he would not still be there... I've been gone for too long."

Eden sighed. "Fine, then. But do you know where we are in relation to your camp?"

Ebba looked around. "Well... I think I started out east of the camp, but... Well..." Ebba blushed. "I got caught in the scenery and I wandered off... I guess we must be to the north of the camp now..."

"Well, the most logical thing has to be to go back to your camp. At some point, Jarin has got to return there... He may very well be heading in our direction now, looking for you."

"And if we happen to run across where he has stepped before, I can track him from there." said Eden quickly.

"Perfect," crowed Acenon before turning to Ebba. "Princess, you can get us back to camp?"

"In a roundabout way, I guess..."

"Then let's get started."

The group moved off into the forest again. Ebba tried to suppress a growing feeling of nervousness. Eden and Acenon had decided how to find Jarin by debating back and forth between the two of them, never really bringing Ebba into the conversation. Ebba supposed they may have just assumed that because she was a princess, Ebba would have no knowledge in the ways of direction and forestry. But they were also forgetting that Ebba and Jarin had been on the run for two years now. Ebba wasn't completely ignorant of the forest's ways.

Nevertheless, Ebba pushed on toward the camp. Eden and Acenon were the only human contact besides Jarin that she had for years now. Ebba was not about the sacrifice that on account of child's doubts.

**Okay, guys, I think that all of the chracters have got to come together around now. So, Incognito mentioned wanting to pick up Jakkin soon. Why not have Jakkin at the camp, and have the two groups meet up about now?

If there are any questions, state them on the DT**
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Revelon Oracio:

"So on we go then," he said. That was when a head came from the thick ´bushes. He pulled his spear with lighting speed. just to see that the head he was pointing it at belonged to Ebba.
His mouth hang open. Ebba's eyes widened "Oh no," she turned to run.
"Wait!" southend Jarin. Ebba almost turned in midair.
"Jarin?" she said with a mild disbelief. Revelon came down from his horse and sheathed his spear.
"Princess Ebba?" he took a step closer.
"Revelon? Is that you?" Ebba asked.
Revelon smiled. "Yes it is, we've been looking for you."
A shadow went over the princess' face "Yes you have," she said with a bitter tone.
"No I don't mean the army... I mean us," he stepped away to let Ebba see everyone behind him.
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I was going to keep waiting for a post from arya, but I'm tired of being out of things, so...

Demeter-

Rosalind and I talked for awhile about lots of things; our past, our favorite things to do, our hobbies, where we expect to be in a few years, etc.

"Well Demeter, it's been fun, but I really have to get going."

I looked around. "Where?"

"Oh, uh..." she looked around as well, and I could tell she was looking for an answer.

I smiled. "Haha don't worry about it. It was nice to meet you, Rosalind. I'll see you around."

She nodded and walked back towards a different area of the forest she had come from. I watched after her for a bit, then looked at the forest immediately across from me. Debating on what I wanted to do, I finally decided to go in. What Rosalind had told me about the things going on inside the town were all a bit too intriguing to be left alone. As I walked through the forest, I came upon a small caravan of sorts, consisting of about seven people. I figured that, since seven was an odd number, I'd see if I could even it up.

*if there aren't already too many people in your group :)*
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**Sorry Rayne, but I absolutely don't know what to write, so could someone bring me in again please. I don't care how, but I'm not having any good ideas at the moment, so please.**
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**Not at all, Rayne, you are in the storybook, aren't you? Arya, check the DT - I'll put up a plot summary**

Ebba

"No I don't mean the army... I mean us," Revelon stepped back to show Ebba two other people behind him. Ebba's eyes widened. She looked at Jarin.

"And you are okay with this?" she asked him, surprised. Jarin raised an eyebrow cynically.

"I've been giving some thought to what you said earlier. About a rebellion."

"And you approve, obviously."

"'Approve'? Perhaps not the best choice of words, Princess. But, yes, I think that a rebellion is inevitable."

"I'm glad," said Ebba fervently. Catching her tone, Jarin shot Ebba a sharp glare.

"Why?"

"Because I've been doing some recruiting myself..."

Jarin's face darkened. "Ebba..." he said warningly.

"Don't get that way, Jarin! We know one of them, and - "

"That just makes it worse!" growled Jarin.

" - and the other is trustworthy. I promise... Let me vouch for her."

Jarin rubbed his temples. "Who are they?"

"A girl named Eden, and, well, it's Acenon..."

Jarin made an irritable noise in the back of his throat. "Only those two?" he asked after a pause.

"Only those."

"Where are they?"

"They were - " Ebba glanced behind herself. "Well, I knew I had gotten a little ahead of them, but - "

"They let you?" cried Jarin exasperatedly.

" - but, I didn't think they were that far - "

At that moment, Acenon and Eden emerged from the bushed behind Ebba. A flicker of recognition flashed on Acenon's face as he saw Jarin. Eden looked slightly alarmed.

"Eden," said Ebba quickly. "This is Jarin..."


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Revelon Oracio:

He smiled. "SO here we have a start of a rebel ion..." He turned to Acenon. "I haven't heard of you since you left without saying a word," he said slightly annoyed.
JArin looked at Revelon confused. "You two know each other?" he asked.
"Oh yes. HE came to my house one day asking me to train him in swordsman ship and duels. As a friend of his father I did teach him. Then one day he vanished, and I got a message that he had ran away from home," he shook his head. "Didn't even say thank you."
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Acenon:

He shrugged, "How could I have said goodbye and thank you? You would've arrested me." He held up his right hand, encased in the gauntlet, "I took this with me."

Revlon nodded, "True, I would've had to come after you. But I would have given you a head start first. Why'd you run away, anyway?"

Acenon looked at the ground for a moment, then looked up again, "When Kenzel started saying Jarin had murdered the royal family, I knew he had to be lying. So I came to find Jarin and see if I could find out the truth and help him or something."

Jarin folded his arms and turned away a little. There was a sarcastic tone to his voice when he spoke, "Yeah, because you could definitely help me fight Kenzel's entire army."

A hurt look passed across Acenon's face for a moment. The rebuke from his hero stung more than a little, and he couldn't think of anything that he'd done to deserve it. Maybe Jarin was just in a bad mood about having to give way to Ebba on the rebellion issue.

Trying to shrug it off, he turned to Eden, "Alright, well Ebba's with Jarin again, could you teach me to track now?"
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If this post seems a bit short, it's because I just ran two miles and I'm extremely exhausted.

Eden

"Alright, well Ebba's with Jarin again, could you teach me to track now?"

Without looking at him I nodded. I did not trust the Revlon character. I was not even sure that I trusted Jarin. He had looked at me strangely, and if he did not trust me, I would not trust him.

I grabbed Acenon's elbow and pulled him a little further than ten yards away from were everyone was gathered. It so silent that I jumped when Acenon asked me, "So who taught you to track?"

"My father, David. It helps when I have to follow odd people who enter the forest and find our clan. But, I use it to find food and water also."

He nodded as I walked around looking for a easy footprint to follow. "Alright, the first thing you need to know is how to find a footprint to track. Here's a doe's footprint. You can tell it's a female because it's smaller and it's not as deep. If it would have been deeper, she would have been expecting a fawn."

Acenon looked at me and smiled. He nodded to encourage me on. "When you're tracking you need to make sure you are almost completely focused on the print. If you lose the print, which you will sometimes, just back track to the last print and start again. Here, follow the print."

He got started. I watched from a distance, making sure I did not give any hints to where the prints were. It took Acenon a few minutes to find the second print, but he started to get he hang of it. I called him back to me to teach him one last thing.

"Now, the most important thing about tracking is letting the animal infiltrate you." He seemed confused, so I explained further, "When you track, over time, you will be able to think like the animal. Your stride will match the animal's and you won't even have to look for the prints, they will just be there. Soon you can see all the animals prints in front of you. You could tell what had happened in an area over the last day or two. It's a little bit different with humans, but almost the same. I can teach you more complicated things as we travel."

Acenon nodded and thanked me. I watched him as he tracked the doe's prints again. It was nice to see he was excited and eager to learn. I never thought I'd teach a proper, noble soldier how to track.

He was doing as well as any gypsy would do for their first time.
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Aliya

Aliya stood in the background of the group, completely discontented in the fact that she had no clue what was going on.

"So what's the plan guys?" she voiced her concerns loudly to the group.

Nearly everyone looked at her. She patiently waited for the answer to her question.

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Rosalind

I went stumbling around in the woods for a while.

I didn't really know what I was doing.

I heard voices and went towards them.

I hid in the bushes for sometime, just in case.

When I saw Jarin, I stepped out.

Everyone turned.

**Sorry, just wanted to be in the story again...**
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