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The Unforgiven

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Which Clan are better

The Unforgiven Clan
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The Apocalyptica Clan
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Vincent stroked Lucinda's hair away from her ears, leaning in.

"I want you...to kill yourself."

Although Lucinda made a valiant attempt at keeping a straight face, Vincent could sense her fear.

"Vincent," she said, her voice trembling slightly, "you don't really think I would-"

She was interrupted by Vincent's cackling. He stepped away from her, laughing so much that he appeared to be vulnerable, though anyone who knew him would know that he was as ready to fight as he would be at any other time.

"No! No, I didn't think you would! And it delights me, it delights me, Lucinda," Vincent turned to face her, "it delights me that you wouldn't sacrifice your life like that. It shows me what you are. It shows the greyness of your soul. Come..."

Vincent began walking towards the forest.

"Come with me. To my grand abode. Those are my terms for sparing the human's life. You may reside where ever you wish within my domain, though I recommend that you stay close to me, if you do not wish to undergo any physical harm at the hands of one of my more feral colleagues. And I can assure you, I will do everything I can to keep you safe during your visit. You may leave at dawn, or later if you wish. So..."

He turned again, leaning on a tree.

"Do we have a deal, rival?"
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"deal" she replied not knowing what she was agreeing into.

Vincent lead her to his castle were vampire stared at her as she entered. They hissed as they smelt the human stench lingering on her body. He lead her to the main room.

"What do you want me for?" Lucinda asked Vincent. He was handsome she had to admit and there was something about him that drew her in.
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"Vincent!" Evie clapped her hands delightedly. "Oh, Vincent, I knew you would bring me a present!" She twirled around the huge, stone hall, faster and faster, until she stopped. Right next to Lucinda. "She even smells like one of them."
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"Who's first?" Zire asked Kathleen.

She put a small, dainty finger on her bottom lip as she looked from human to human. "Hmm...That one." She pointed to the man she had first talked to, sauntering over to him and swaying her hips. He stared at her, amazed. Crawling towards the edge of the cage, he wrapped his hands around the bars and pressed his face up to the freezing metal. Katie turned to Zire, holding out her hand. "Key, please." Suddenly the key was in Katie's hand, and the human was amazed. The red-eyed man didn't even move an inch!

Katie unlocked the cage and swung the door open. "You're free, sweetie," she told the man. He looked up at her for a second then hastily scrambled out of the cage. She grabbed his shirt collar before he could make a run for it. "Hold on, dear. You're not that free." She shut the cage and locked it before the other man inside could even blink. She gently gripped the back of his neck and balled the front of his shirt with her fist. "We're gonna play a little game called hide and seek. You have twenty minutes to run." she whispered. Fear played in the man's eyes, and the instant Katie let go, he ran for his life.

She turned to Zire. "And that's what I love about being a female." Leading him back over to the knives, she said, "Now you get to pick the weapon, however I don't think I'll be needing it."
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Vincent stared at Evie for a second, before turning back to Lucinda.

"Lucinda, I presume you are aware of the great Human wars of the early 20th century?"

She nodded.

"Excellent. You won't believe how ignorant some of my fellows are. The Humans have a special day, every year. And in the great Human war, they stopped fighting on that day, and they simply forgot about the war. Just for the day. I respect them for that, it's a virtue which has never been displayed, to my knowledge, by our kind. Would you not like to break boundaries and befriend your greatest enemy for a night?"

Lucinda was about to answer, but Vincent interrupted her when he remembered Evie.

"Please excuse me one moment."

He took a step towards Evie, so that he was looking down his nose at her.

"Evie," he whispered soothingly, "how can I put this delicately...I have plans for Lucinda. Fragile plans. The smallest insult could destroy my plans. And we don't want that, now, do we dear?"

Evie shook her head.

"Good girl," Vincent said patronisingly, patting Evie on the shoulder, "so, what I suggest is that you stay well away from her, lest you hurt her without thinking. Is that understood?"
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"Ahh, well i think you should take one anyway, You never know when..." I said seriously "But then again, who would attack us inside here"

Katie grinned and started running, a second and she had almost already caught the man.

"You're turn" I said licking my lips as i let the rest f the humans go.

They on the other hand did not need an explaining as the ran in different directions. I pounced on the closest one, a child of about ten.

The blood, entering my system was warm, exactly how a vampire liked it, but it only took a few minutes for the child to die making him useless. So i ran to the next human, I knew Katie was doing the same, we had all the time in the world. But a meeting could bee called out any minute, so i didn't feed as slow as i did usually.
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Evie left the room and Vincent now stood infornt of me again.

"Well if thats what I have to do the keep my human alive then thats what i'll do" She smiled, this was just an excuse. She did actually want to spend the time with Vincent, see if he had a soft said.

"But let me just remind you, if this goes wrong my clan will attack and we are bigger than yours" Lucinda reminded him.

"Dont worry, I wont hurt you" He laughed.

"What are we to do then" She asked.
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As Lucinda spoke, Vincent heard a distant noise in the background. He was certain it was a human scream. Luckily, Lucinda didn't seem to have noticed.

"Well...I didn't really have any plans, but..."

Vincent, now listening for offputting sounds, gritted his teeth as another Human screamed distantly.

"What was that?" Lucinda asked.

"I didn't hear anything," Vincent lied, "whatever it is, it's probably nothing to worry about. A wild beast, perhaps. Anyway..."

Vincent stalled as he thought of a way to get Lucinda to where she wouldn't be able to hear the Human butchering. He considered where the source of the noise was - most likely on the ground floor. He decided a session in the observatory, the highest point in the castle, would be his best bet.

"Do you like stars, Lucinda?"
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"Yeah" she smiled as she watched him lead her to the observetory.

"Take a seat" he said as he made hand gestures towards the cusions of the floor. Lucinda layed watching the stars.

"Its so beautiful" She whispered as she watched a single very bright star.

"It is isn't it" He said as he sat down beside her. Vincent looked very handsome in his ruffled shirt but his heart was ugly and filled with evil. Another thing Lucinda wished for was that there might be more nights like this.
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A certain type of inner power filled Katie's entire body as the warm metallic liquid rushed over her tongue. She quickly gulped it down her throat, not savoring it like usual. She had an odd feeling that something unexpected was about to happen; even though she rarely got those feelings, she was smart enough to listen to them. Suddenly a breeze soared through the hall, and she smelled a familiar scent that she hadn't smelled in practically forever.

Lifting her mouth from a human woman's neck, she felt her fangs draw out of the cooling skin, barely any blood running from the wounds. Her eyes danced with fury and confusion. Suddenly another human ran into the hall, and in a flash Zire was on top of her, already latched onto her neck.

"Lucinda," Kathleen breathed. Zire looked up from the woman's neck.
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*Yeah, I dunno what to post, help me out Paramore.




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*I want someone to have a baby, like a super vampire baby hehe*

Helene stared at Leon and then she felt a pain in her head.

"Whats wrong" Leon asked,

She looked up at him, " Lucinda's not here"

"Dont worry about her Helene, she can take care of herself" Leon said strokeing her hair and kissing her again.

Helene puled away, "Leon, I think somethings wrong.. I keep getting images of Lucinda in The Apocalyica castle and shes with Vincent. The wierd thing is I see them smiling and enjoying themselfs"

"So thats a good thing" Leon smiled,

"No that could mean she's joining them"
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*lol, ok then, Leon and Helene will eventually have a super baby.....lol*
I sighed. We were really starting to go somewhere.


"Alright, we'll check on Lucinda." I replied.

"But we'll have to be careful" I added.

"Thank you Leon" She said smiling at me. "And when we get back, we'll have a little fun, Kay?" She said smiling

"Lead the way" I said and we both jolted out the door, Me following her of course.




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"Ohh yes, shes here all right" I hissed in anger "And with...."

I stopped and looked at Katie, i could see from her face that she had smelled him too.

"With Vincent" i finished and we were both on our feet running towards the smells.

There was something going on that was not supposed to happen. we emerged to where we needed to go in a few minutes.

"Vincent!" I hissed then added in a calmer tone "You brought a enemy to our borders?"
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*yeah super baby hehe*

Helene gracefully walked thought the forest with Leon strutting behind her. The green forest trees brushed against Helene pure white skin and her long black hair trailed behind her. Leon's short messy hair blew in his face and the sun made him smile. They were gald that the 'vampire' myths wern't true.

"This way" Helene said as he pointed in the direction of a big dark castle that reminded Helene of The Underworld movie. As she walked inside vampires stared as they could smell human on them.

"You need a bath" leon laughed,

"Very funny Leon" She grinned sarcasticly.

A tall vampire with long black hair, stopped them in there tracks.

"Where do you two think your doing" He said in a posh russian accent.

Helene remembered his name, she had turned him in his early days.

"Byron...." Helene said,

"Helene.... Is that really you" Byron now said his voice now polite.

"Byron just let us though, My leige is in your castle" She said her voice now angry, her eyes now black.

"I dont no Helene, I might be killed...." Byron replied, "But as your the reason i have my vampire life"

Byron smiled and let the pass. He was a very handsome vampire, His long black curly hair fit his face and his eyeliner made him look amazeing. I could see the regret in his eyes when Leon walked back.
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Every rose has it's thorn..
Just like every night has it's dawn.


I've matured a lot and I realised it was time to come back.. for good!



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