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The Unforgiven

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Which Clan are better

The Unforgiven Clan
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The Apocalyptica Clan
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Ollie walked alone down the dark streets a chill wind seeping through the houses on the winds Ollie heard a little girls voice "mommy wake up mommy please wake up" Ollie followed the girls cry until she found the girl standing by her mother " hey" Ollie said in a comforting voice "go up their get an ambulance and then come back okay" as she left Ollie felt the mothers pulse it was gone but Ollie wasn't going to let all her blood go to waste "it's better this way" Ollie said before gently sucking away her blood he covered the fang marks up with the color of the mothers Jacket he stood up and wiped the blood from his lip it was cold Ollie always preferred warm blood. Ollie walked down the alleyway a woman was holding the little girl in her jaws ruffly sucking away her blood as the vampire dropped it's finished meal it turned to see Ollie "you shouldn't of done that" he said. she licked her lips for the last of the blood "we'll see" she said.




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**Hey, jok101. All you have are run-on sentences, and your post isn't spaced properly. Can you take a glance at other people's posts and make adjustments to your own, please? It would make it so much easier to read. ^_^**

Kathleen smiled joyfully as Zire led her down the hallway, quickly weaving in and out of the other vampires. "Yeah, of course; I could totally use some fun." Her eyes glittered and danced, imagining a gleeful chase, giving the humans a twenty minute head start. They turned a corner and into a dimly lit room with two metal cages.

Katie let go of Zire's hand and walked up to one of the cages, bending over to see what was inside it. "How many did you get, Zire?" she asked, seeing two men inside one cage. She hadn't even glanced inside the other one.

"About five," he replied.

"W-what was that?" one of the men croaked, backing up against the bars of the cage.

She smiled sweetly. "You can't see, can you?" she cooed. "Is it too dark in here? I'm sorry. I barely noticed; I guess my eyesight is better than yours." Kathleen turned and winked at Zire, who smiled and chuckled.

"Didn't your mother ever tell you not to play with your food?" he asked as she went to the lightswitch, his eyes bright.
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"Unfortunately, she didn't" replied Katie winking.

I laughed at that and walked towards her.

"Five humans, one hour, i wonder what we could do?" I asked her.

"Who are you?" one of the humans asked after their eyes adjusted to the light.

"The more appropriate question would be 'What are we?'" replied Katie then added "Isn't that right Zire?"

"Correct" I replied observing a large set of knives of different sizes.

"Who's first?" I asked from Katie.
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Ah! Im sorry to keep ya waiting xxparamorexx, P.S. excuse me if my posts are a little short, for im on my Wii not my computer..


Helene stared at me and asked to go hunting...
I nodded and grabbed her hand.
I grinned and whispered "Lead the way"




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* its ok sic :D *

Helene smiled as he held his hand in hers. She lead the way out the fornt of the castle towards the forest. She knew that she had seen a bear out her earlier and that would be a nice snack.

"Over there" I said as I pointed at the big bear in the corner of the woods." Be my guest, I have already fed today"

"Thanks" He grinned as he got closer.
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I pounced on the bear and proceeded to kill it.
Quickly I finished feeding and approached Helene.
"It's getting cold, we should leave." I wrapped my arms around her chest and pulled her closer to my body to keep her warm.




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**Helenes new picture, Im the emoish one*

Helene had always been close the Leon but now she felt even closer. She smelt the sweet sent that was on Leon, was it cologne? It was very different to any smell she had smelt before. I held his arm over her shoulder and they walked back to the castle. Eyes stared as he held my hand. He watched his perfect lips move as he told her she could come to his room if she wanted. She nodded and followed him.
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I led her to my room. When you stepped in, there was a sudden rush of warmth.
Helene sat on the edge of my bed and looked around.
"Very nice!"She said grinning.
"Meh, I try." I said, and sat dow next to her. She began staring at my cold blue eyes. I immediatly took the moment, and for the first time, kissed her.
I put my lips over her top lip as if to say I was ready. Slowly she opened her mouth, and i let my tongue free.




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Helene enjoied the moment while she could but pushed him off.

"I cant" she said as she looked into his innocent blue eyes.

"Why" He asked me puzzled,

"The queen said something about people getting close"

"Do we have to tell the queen, or could it be our secret"
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By the way people who are having a relationship in this storybook who are in the unforgiven clan you have to keep it a sercret. The Queen will not let you have an relationahip incase they die, she dont want you to be upset.
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I could tell that by the way she was looking at me, She really wanted this.
"Forget the queen and relax, it will be fine" I whispered and began kissing her again.




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"Ok" she said and returned the kiss.

She heard a quiet knocking at the door. Helene ignored it but Leon seemed to want to answer.

"Just ignore it" I whispered to him.

He just smiled and wrapped his arm around her. She nuzzled at his neck.
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Vincent wandered through the castle's dark halls without purpose. His mind, it seemed, was as dark and melancholy as the ancient structure he inhabited. Three centures of experiences, good and bad, played out in his head.
He decided he needed to do something to get distract himself. Like hunting.
Vincent considered finding one of the numerous modern weapons which could be found lying around the castle, but instead he opted to go old school with a musket. He would probably use his sword, anyway. It was more pleasurable, that way.

The stars were shining bright as Vincent wandered through the forest, searching for worthy prey. In the distance, he saw a bear. It wasn't really what he considered to be "worthy", but he spontaneously shot at it anyway. He deliberately aimed slightly low, so as to cause the bear to panic and run.
"Let the games commence..."
He walked in the direction of the bear, accelerating at an unnatural pace. A bird fluttered behind Vincent, causing him to turn and cut it in two. He turned away, and sniffed for the bear's scent. He continued walking for a minute, until he was near the edge of the wood. There, he witnessed a vampire pounce on the bear. The vampire, a male, was accompanied by a female vampire. He knew, somehow, that they were not Apocalypticans, but he decided not to attack them - he was alone and, though he was confident in his ability to take on multiple enemies, he didn't want to take any chances.
The male vampire spoke to the female.
"It's getting cold, we should leave."
The two vampires embraced, before walking away. When they were out of sight, Vincent went to investigate the spot they had previously occupied. He became faintly aware that he was being watched. He swung round, drawing his sword and adopting a combat stance.
"I know you're there! Show yourself!"
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Lucinda walked out from the shadows.

"Vincent" She said as she held out her sword that had before rested at her side. It was black and red, with latin words ingraved in the side 'PROVEHITO IN ALTUM' That ment Launch forth into the deep.

"Lucinda" He glared at her and there was silence.

"What are you doing here" She asked as she stared at his perfect face.

"I couldn't resist your smell" He laughed,

"Such a charmer"

"Oh, you noticed"

In a second Vincent was close behind lucinda, taking in the smell of the blood in her clothes.

"Human" Vincent said as his eyes turned a fierce red, "Your hiding a human"

Lucinda eyes stiffened as he said this. Was he going to hurt him.

"Vincent please, I'll do anything" She pleaded

"Well there is one thing"
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Name: Jared Leto

Age: 37

Gender: male

Good or bad: good but could be perseuded, He is a human

Personality: shy and quiet.

Appearances:(pictures would be great)

History:unknown, he just ended up at the castle after Lucinda had found him, But there is something tempting about his blood that makes everyone around him want to bite him. What we do no about his past is that he used to be a very good actor and singer.

Other: Up for love
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Every rose has it's thorn..
Just like every night has it's dawn.


I've matured a lot and I realised it was time to come back.. for good!



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