Hey Sarah, I'm back for another review Title: Doctor/Mister Vanderguard-Milton
Link: topic39909.html Genre: Other Fiction
It's the first part. So the plot has not developed at all yet-what I really need help on is wording and descriptions. Any suggestions you have to offer are much appreciated!
'life tastes sweeter when it's wrapped in poetry' -the wombats
kissthewitch - We've already gone over why I can't review that certain piece lol.
Galerius - Workin' on it now.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Hi there, I would be eternally grateful for your thoughts on my newest piece.
I have added to the end of the story the things that I am specifically looking for, but anything you can contribute is appreciated!
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Sarah! Wow! People really, really love your reviews! I can totally see how, too, you know, you are just amazing... and that's why I would love you forever (not that I already don't) if you could review my prologue to this story I'm writing and not sure if I'm continuing .
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Haruno and anti - you're in queue this very moment.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
By the sweat of your brow you will eat your food until you return to the ground, since from it you were taken; for dust you are and to dust you will return. — Genesis 3:19
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