I know you have a lot to do already, but if you can... It's a three-part story. It's called Tangled Up In Blue, and it's from the Romance Section. You can review the three parts, or just the first one, whatever you want.
Could you please review my story, Gingerbread - topic63471.html
Specifically, I was wondering if you could focus on characters, the ending and the suggestion that I have quoted in the piece itself (you'll see what I mean when you read it.)
Thanks so much! Feel free to pick it apart, any feedback is appreciated
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
Words are pale shadows of forgotten names. As names have power, words have power. Words can light fires in the minds of men. Words can wring tears from the hardest hearts. — Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
