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**Ya, that works Kitty, thanks**

Tylana ran down the hall ways scaring most of the unarmed guards away. Any that were armed were a little harder to get past. She saw the man from earlier standing with a group of other men scientist and she stopped.

"You've missed behaved." He sneered at the three of them. Tylana winced at his voice, but hunkered down as if about to jump at him and she growled warning him that she would attack.

I don't think a wolf is going to scare him. Lana said, Tylana nodded and started thinking what big animals had she seen. What animal would be fast but big. 'ELEPHANT" she smiled to herself and changed, this time it hurt. She moaned in pain, then looked at the man. She could run over them maybe. Her eyes started to droop a little. Shifting made her tired. She shook her head and pawed at the ground.

I hope this is the first floor, if not I don't know how long it will hold me.
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<<Selina>>

Selena glanced around hurriedly, taking in the chaotic scene around her. Guards ran back and forth, calling for non-existent reinforcements. So many precautions had been taken to avoid this kind of thing, and now they were being torn apart in seconds.

Selena's green eyes took in the elephant. It was charging down the hallway towards her, trumpeting. Selena neede to move, and fast. She had taken the form of one of the guards, after having escaped from her cell earlier. Quickly changing into a house-finch, un-noticed by the frantic guards, she flew up by the elephant's face. She alighted on its head, hoping it would recognize her to be a friend. She panted for a few minutes. It took less energy to transform herself into a smaller creature, but it was still exhausting.




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Name: Lethero (duh)

Age: 22

Race: Werewolf

Description: Snow white fur with blood red eyes. Wears black clothing and carries a knife at his hip.

Personality: Is a feirce fighter and finds it hard to trust anyone.

Powers: Can somehow manipulate water.
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-How do we get past them?- Lana wondered as the group of scientists blocking the exit grew and grew.

"This way looks as good as any," I replied with a wide grin as I turned right abruptly and floated through the wall. A loud crash rang out as Tylana followed in her elephant form, creating an opening big enough for the telepath to follow. I glanced around the corridor and, finding it empty, I proceeded to hover through the next wall as well.

-Don't you use doors?- Lana grumbled as they followed me again.

"Feel free to take a different route," I replied, "there's no reason for us to remain together."
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wow when i first posted i had no idea we were escaping so fast! hmm, i shall have to find a way to join you hmmm... any ideas? thx




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**I don't think any of us did, I think we will have to be stopped so we can all get out at the same time when everyone is there so we all get out together. We are going to meet Lethero outside of the place. Here I'll get my girl stopped, and then start a discussion thread. Everyone that is free doesn't have to get caught again, we can all just meet outside.**


Tylana froze, there were others there. She looked back and shook her head, they could get them out later. She started towards another door when she felt something hit her leg. She looked down and saw a needle, it had already emptied into her. Her head started to get light and she fell to the ground the world slowly getting dark. She woke up strapped to a table thing next to the enviroment area. Her head hurt and there was a collar on her neck. She had never had to wear one of them. Of course she had never tried to get away. She tried to shift form and she felt the collar shock her, stopping her attempt. The tall man stepped in front of her and frowned.

"You caused a lot of damage with your escape attempt." He growled, "You and your little friends shouldn't have tried to get away."

'Did they get away?' She thought to herself, hoping they had.

"And then stealing a book from our personal library was even worse, I knew my father let you have to long of a leash in keeping you from all the harsher things. But now, he's gone. Your gonna get it worse, and don't ever think you will see a book again." He hissed smiling. "Though I'm sure you'll put up a good fight tomorrow. Just a few more hours before it starts, thanks to you and the others attempt we are bumping the session up to eight in the morning, you best get your sleep."
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The alarms were still blaring, but things were starting to die down. Someone's escape plan must have been ruined.I knew how they felt, though. I wanted to escape this place. I wanted to escape this white room. The scientists said I was lucky to have such a nice room, to actually have light. If I were really that lucky I wouldn't be here.I stepped toward the door,maybe I should try. Maybe my guards weren't back yet. I had just touch the door handle when Christopher walked in. Christopher was one of the younger scientists, as far as I knew. Christopher was cute, yet cruel. That's just one thing that made this place terrible."Were you trying to run away?" he asked.I didn't talk, there wasn't a lie in my head, or at least not a good one. "Your father wouldn't be so happy with you," Christopher said, shoving me into a stiff white chair.

"I'm pretty sure that your dad wouldn't be so happy with you either, if he knew what you did for a living." I replied.

"Parents don't matter to me," Christopher said. I didn't say anything and let him start lecturing me. "Every little thing you do, good or bad, has a effect Katrina." Christopher punched me. He was just like HIM, a little evil prodigy. A memory sharp as a thorn slipped into my head.

"What's the matter, Honey?" He had asked.

"I don't know where she is! Saber's gone!" A tear had slid down my face at that momment.

"Come with me," he had said. I had followed him. He took me to the pet store and we got a brand new cat.

That was sort of like a goodbye present, now that I think of it. He knew what was coming up in a few days. Betrayal.

Anger surged through me. That bastard! I didn't know how I did it but my shadow became sorta solid. My shadow started punching Christopher, one after another.

"Katrina," he whimpered, curled up one the floor, trying to shield his face.

"Every little thing you do has an effect," I whispered to him before he lost concousness.
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Alright, I am going to make another character cause we need more guys.


Name: Trent
Age: 24
Picture: http://eldanis.deviantart.com/art/Zakreth-47545088
Race: Bellow/shape shifter
Abilities: When he gets in water he can change to any water creature. He is strong,
Personality: Very Protective, sweet caring guy, will kill anyone that hurts his friends
History: He was taken at the age of ten. (by the way, your character's can have been taken at a young age. That is fine, it is just that they are now older)
Other: Up for fallin in love :P He is also Tylana's brother. Though neither know it.
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As requested, here is my other character. TN has already claimed him, as far as i know...

Name: Rekhyt (Prefers to be called Rek, for short)

Age: 5000+ but looks only 23 most of the time.

Race: Djinni (A shapeshifting spirit that is summoned by humans to be their slaves.)

Gender: Male

Abilities: Can use magic, can change shapes, and can read some minds.

Appearance: Appears as many different things, but mainly likes to go around as a young Egyptian boy or a Scholar or Medieval Knight (Scholar is he needs to sneak around and go undetected/inconspicuous, but they look the same minus the armor) of about 23 years old (Which was how he was captured). When in the form of the scholar, he has shaggy brown hair, cold blue eyes, and has a tall and lanky build. As the Egyptian boy, he has black, short hair and ageless black eyes. He stands about 5' 7". All other forms are either animals, or he rarely uses them.

Picture: http://krimsonblood.deviantart.com/art/ ... s-62378928

Personality: He is sarcastic and witty, intelligent, and funny. He has a temper but rarely lets it show. He has an ancient memory and is very wise, despite his childish attitude. If he doesn't like you, he will seem incredibly dark, bitter, and spiteful. But around friends he lightens up and can be goofy and funny, changing shapes into amusing guises for the entertainment of others.

History: He has been summoned many times before and is now the slave of one of the scientists. He was captured and forced to work for one of his captors. Other than that, nothing is really important.

Other: He is up for grabs, but i think TN has claimed him. Also, if you want more info on Djinni's, either read The Bartimaeus Trilogy by Johnathan Stroud or look up 'Bartimaeus' on google/wikipedia. I'll try to explain it as well as i can during the course of the StoryBook.
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Amber

I heard Tylana cry out and turned to see the girl sprawled across the floor, her brown hair cloaking her face and the celestial wings laying limp. I couldn't see Lana but I could see a scientist, holding one of those strange weapons that fired the sedative needles. She pointed it at me and shot one through my chest. It hit the wall behind me with a clink.

"Stay back spirit," she warned. I approached Tylana and then realised that it would take more strength than I had to become solid enough to carry her and avoid getting hit by a needle. Instead I decided to enter the scientist's body. I bent down to pick my new aquaintance up and then felt the sharp prick of a needle strike my host. Darting out before she fell to the floor, I turned in time to see a second scientist wearing a dark green mask across his face. He released the sleeping gas.
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**I'll go in for that fight, or for hunting down the escapees**

Name: Tranquility

Age: Appears 22, actually over 3000.

Race: Forkrul Assail (Really long limbed, really tall people with multiple joints in their limbs, hands and sternum.)

Gender: Male

Abilities: Regeneration, multi-jointedness, very strong and agile. Not as invincible as Forkrul Assail in general.

Appearance: Extremely lanky, with longish hair and thin limbs. He has solid black eyes (standard for his race). He stands about 7'5". Looks more human than the picture.

Picture: http://shadaan.deviantart.com/art/Forkr ... l-38463559

Personality: What most would call 'psychotic' - kills anyone he sees using violent action, except when under the influence of a mind controlling drug developed by the scientists to keep him in check. Outside of that, he is still incredibly critical and spiteful. All of this is the result of his time with the scientists, and he used to be a lot less judgmental than the rest of his race.

History: Was always something of a misfit among his people, being less powerful and displaying more human emotions than them. Was contained by the scientists through the use of their creatures and studied extensively by them. Most of the study involved inflicting severe wounds on him or bending his limbs to test his limits.

Other: Check http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Races_of_t ... rul_Assail for info on Forkrul Assail, but I'll try to explain it as we go along.
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Trent-

Trent sat in his room, it was seven by seven by eight, foot room. The walls were black and he was kept in the dark most of the time. That was until he was taken out to be tested on. The door opened and he felt a shock run through his body from the collar on his neck. He clenched his fist, they didn't have to do that every time they came in. A short skinny lady walked in, he could snap her in half if he wanted to but she held the control to his collar and wasn't afraid to use it even if she didn't need to.

"Get up." Her annoyingly high pitched voice commanded. He did and she walked out of the room as he followed. There were two huge men on the outside of the door. Where they found these men he didn't know. They walked on either side of him as the lady quickly walked ahead of them. He saw a huge hole in the wall and stopped. He felt a shock in his neck and he winced. He kept walking, something had happened someone had gotten away.

"What happened?" He asked walking faster to catch up to the lady.

"A project tried to get away. It is none of your worry." She replied harshly as they walked into the enviroment room. He hadn't been in there in ages. He was led into another room the same size as his other one and the door was shut and locked. He sat down and closed his eyes. He shapeshifted into the only thing he knew of, a small mongoose. He curled up in one of the corners and fell asleep.
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***ah!! soooo confused! Can someone fill me in through PM or something, please? I"m grounded, so I might not post way often for the next few days. If we escape again, can someone throw my character into the group? Thanks a million!! ~Bella~***
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((Guys, I'm gonna switch to first person because I think it'll work out easier for me.))

((Lana))

Tylana went down in front of me. I whipped around and ran. Through the door and into the environment room. We were so close too. The room immediately felt like a tropical rain forest. So they think they could smoke me out? I think not. I ran to the center of the room, whacking at ferns and thick brush.

I came to the center of the room to find the roof wide open.

"Yes!" I cried out, "Rise!" The dirt below me created a platform and rose up towards the sky. I felt exhausted but it worth it to get out. The dumb scientists must've left it open. I assumed that everyone had gotten out by the gaping hole. The dirt started to shudder under me. Shit I thought. I bunched my legs up and thrust myself into the night sky. I grabbed the edge of the roof.

I felt my fingers slipped but my head didn't process the data being sent. I fell and landed without even realizing what had happened. The sirens stopped as I slipped into the sweet darkness of sleep.



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