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Rekhyt-

I watched warily as the others ran off. Obviously they didn’t know who or what I was. I bit my lip, dreading what would have to be done.

I figured I’d give them a chance.

“Wait,” I called desperately. One stopped and turned back; the boy my master had taken from his cell and brought to here. Soon the others slowed, too, all eyes on me.

“For what?” one of them asked.

“If you leave…” I trailed off. Maybe I shouldn’t go there quite that fast. Let’s try a different approach.

“I can’t go.”

“Why?” the guy from earlier asked, taking a step towards me.

“I am bound to one of the scientists. I am her slave.”

“What are you?”

I sighed deeply. “I am a Djinni. A shapeshifting spirit, if you will. I was summoned from the Other Place and forced to work as a slave even while they did test after test on me. If I leave, she can just summon me back to her and force me to reveal everything from where we’re hiding to what clothes you have on. There is nothing I can do. If I try to break free or kill her, I die.
“And if you leave, I’ll be forced to stop you against my will. My master commanded me to. If I disobey her, she can condemn me to any torture she sees fit, or kill me even, though I know she wouldn’t kill me.”

I saw another, long-limbed creature enter the room. He eyed everyone critically, their black depths that rivaled mine lingering on me for a moment longer. He nodded and gestured to me, though what the gesture meant i was unsure.

My mind struggled to find a way out of my current assignment.
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"Finally, you've woken," a scientist grumbled as I let out a sharp cry of pain. I blinked my eyes and realised that the room was flooded with electricity. My room. Great.

The man waited outside until the current had dissapitated and then opened the door.

"This way," he instructed. I did not move. "The electric fields are down now move before I raise them again!" he commanded. I left the room. I then attempted to escape through a wall but the man shocked me with a huge weapon he was carrying and I crashed into it.

"New technology," he explained. "You'll be solid until we reach the enviroment chamber. Come along." He took me roughly by the arm and while I marvelled at having his fingers actually touch my flesh, he marched me to a huge room and shoved me in. Less than a minute later, i was myself again.

I tried to phase through the doors only to find them surrounded by a strong electric current. Great.
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Tylana-

Tylana scampered back out of the hole when the others didn't follow. She ran into Trent's leg and looked at the two new comers while peeking out from under his legs. He swooped his hand down and picked her up placing her on his shoulders. Careful not to hurt him Tylana wrapped her tail around his upper arm to stay up. She didn't know why she trusted him so much, but she did.


Trent-

Trent looked at the Djinni and then the limber guy. The Djinni didn't seem to want to stop their escape but he didn't know about this new guy. And then there was the ghost girl, or whatever she would call herself, he wasn't sure. Maybe sense he could see all these people he would be able to shapeshift into them. He smiled at the thought.

"So why are we in here?" He asked carefully, he had to find a way to get the Djinni to be able to come with them. What if someone else killed his 'master'. They deserved it for all that the scientist did to them.
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Bella~

I looked around the room at all the other people. Experiments, that's all we were. Experiments and oddities. Why we were in this room, none of us knew. All of the nervous looks told me that no one wanted to find out either.

I noticed a man standing a little way off. He had wings...of course, that didn't phase me. Most of us looked strange, after all. I approached him slowly, changing my glamour a bit as I walked. By the time I reached him, my hair, normally a firey orange, had black tips, and my eyes were glinting red. My clothes had changed as well (the best part of glamour), so that I was wearing a red/black/grey/white plaid mini-skirt, and a red tanktop over a black tanktop. (I have a sick obsession with layering).

"Hi, I'm Bella," I said, grinning at him. I tasted lipstick, and realized I must've added that subconciously. "Who're you?"

"Kida," he answered quietly.

"That's a rad name," I answered. He smirked, as did any person who heard me say 'rad'. "Why are you here?"
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Tranquility's black eyes focused on the man with the mongoose on his arm.

"I have been led to believe that you are to fight each other in a display of your unique skills and personal strengths. The Djinni and I are to observe you and make sure you do not escape."

He took a step backwards, one arm bending back to scratch his shoulder idly.
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Asher woke up to the feel of what he assumed to be grass. As he took in his surroundings he saw a group of other experiments talking to each other. They obviously hadn't noticed him yet.

The other projects didn't concern him. Asher wasn't going to be forced to fight them, the scientists would have to kill him first. He looked around and saw the observation deck. Just seeing those men, seeing them with their clipboards, recording data, treating them like animals, filled him with rage. The only thing that was on Asher's mind now was to kill those men.

He let out a full throated roar and ran full speed toward the observation deck. His skin had changed to black scales and his hands had morphed into claws. He nearly trampled two of the other experiments as he passed by.

He thrust his hand into the wall, piercing the metal with his claws. He did the same with the other until he was climbing up the wall. Escaping this place didn't even matter to him now, all that mattered was killing these sickos.

(I hope this isn't considered god-modding. If not, it'll certainly provide a solution to the Djinni's situation.)
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*As long as you don't kill to many of them you are fine, now I need to edit my post a little.

Trent-

Trent froze, was he kidding!

"That's barbaric!" He nearly yelled but he kept his voice down. He felt the girl tighten her grip on his arm with her tail probably feeling the same way. She suddenly jumped off and before her feet touched the ground she had turned into a huge cat like creatures. A huge lion, she snarled at the limber guy, Tranquility. He didn't look phased though. Trent wanted to keep her from getting herself hurt. "Why do they want us to fight?" He demanded, "I thought they didn't want to kill any of us."


Tylana-


Tylana sat back down wanting to hear the answer. She growled when the guy shifted his weight. She wanted to kill him so bad if he was helping the scientist, he couldn't ruin their plan. She alreayd wanted to find out a way to get the Djinni out of there, But she didn't know how. There had to be a way. But what that was was going to be hard to figure out. She suddenly heard a loud roar and just barely got out of the way as another project ran past her. he started climbing the wall. For the first time she saw the observation deck. She pushed the wings out of her back and flew up following him still in lion form. If he needed help she was going to give it.
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Tranquility looked from the dragon scaling the wall back to the lion snarling at him, before turning back to Trent.

"I'm am not sure if you are to kill each other, they simply wish to see which of you is the most powerful."

One of the scientists screamed as he noticed the dragon coming towards them.

"Assail! Help us!"

Tranquility turned and began sprinting towards the base of the wall, hauling himself up it using the holes punched in it by the dragon. He knew he couldn't possibly save them all, not with the dragon where it was, but the drug was compelling him to try.

Even as made his way towards the dragon, he heard the lion roar behind him.

(Go ahead and eat a couple anyway)
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Tylana-

Tylana stopped before she reached the top when she saw the limber guy start up after the dragon. She dove down towards him roaring out loud. She plumtted down towards him roaring. She grabbbed him by the back and yanked him off the wall. She didn't dare change to her human form, she wouldn't be strong enough.



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(My pleasure.)

(I'm only planning on killing the scientists in the observation deck.)

"Project 18 has gone renegade, stop him!"

Even though the intercom was blaring with the voices of the scientists, in his rage Asher heard no words. The only thing that went through his mind was revenge on what these men did to him and everyone else in this man-made Hell.

He made it to the observation deck window. All the men were horrified to see the dragon. Asher let out another roar as he punched the glass as hard as he could once, twice, three times. The bulletproof glass broke under the force of Asher's claw. He saw some of the scientists scrambling for the metal box on the wall. It had a gun inside and read, "break glass in case of emergency."

That only fueled Asher's anger, he was not going to die without taking someone with him. He inhaled as much as he could then blew a stream of fire into the deck through the hole he had made in the glass. The scientists screamed as they dropped to the floor and rolled. Asher used his free hand to break away the glass and made the hole big enough for his body to fit through. Once he was inside the observation deck his killing spree began.
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Tranquility collapsed to the ground, before pulling himself once again upright and bending unnaturally around the lion's attacks, before grabbing her with both hands and tossing her through the air.

Tylana's wings unfolded in midair and she flew at him again as he made for the wall, this time pinning him to the ground, teeth ripping into him. The Assail screamed in rage, blue blood gushing from his face and chest. He lashed out wildly and threw the lion off him, staggering to his feet once more, wounds already beginning to close. Where was that goddamn Djinni?.

He leaped back onto the wall and began climbing as fast as he was able.
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**My girl is going to be a BIG pain in his side*


Tylana-

Tylana jumped back up into the air and shot up after him. She barely made it to the top after he did climbing through the hole and jumping on his back to keep him away from the dragon. He threw her off again, but she just jumped up and ran at him. She wasn't going to stop until she had to. She ran into a scientist on the way and tossed her aside with one flick of her paw. It landed in the lady's head, snapping her neck. Tylana froze, she just killed someone. That wasn't any better then what the scientist were doing. She shook her head, she would have to worry about that later. She ran after the limber guy again ready to attack him as soon as she reached him.
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Tranquility sighed softly, turning from the dragon to the more present threat of the lion. He lashed out suddenly with one hand, sending her sprawling across the room.

"Cease your violence, I do not want to have to kill you."

He threw himself onto the dragon's back, long arms wrapping around his neck like a pair of snakes.
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*Told ya she would :D, feel free to knock her out, she'll leave you alone then *

Tylana-


Tylana pulled herself up. Her front paw, her left arm, screamed in pain. She thought quickly, what animal had she seen that didn't need that arm. She quickly turned into a snake, with wings, and flew at the thing wrapping her self around his neck but keeping her neck hidden under her so he couldn't kill her. She tightened her grip on his neck.


Trent-

Trent hurridly climbed up the wall and jumped into the room just as a snake wrapped itself around the limber guy's throat.
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Asher let out another roar as he tried to lash out at the Assail on his back. He tried slamming him into the wall a few times but it didn't seem to work. His rage burned like the fires of Hell itself as he tried to throw Tranquility off his back. He finally got fed up and sunk his teeth into the creature's arm.

Tranquility cried out in pain as the dragon tore through his skin. Asher reached back and grabbed the long limbed creature by the shoulders, not noticing or even caring about the snake around Tranquility's neck. With great force Asher threw him into one of the computer desks.

Asher roared as loud as he could before tackling Tranquility as he got back up. The force of the tackle sent both of them through the window.
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