if you want your writing to be completely torn apart cmere

Please tear this to shreds!
Genre: Fantasy, Dramatic
Length: 6,133-or-so words
Luminous

Hey, so I was just wondering if you could review my work? I'm trying to get as much feed back as I can before I go back and take each sentence apart to edit with all the reviews. It would really mean a lot to me even if you don't get through everything, I know its long... one chapter will make me a happy camper Thank you!

Here is the link:
(Undecided) #1: Ch. 1-5

I have an intro to a series I'm most likely going to continue, and I'd like feedback. If you have a suggestion, don't not put it in because you're being polite.
But I guess that's what this thread is about, isn't it? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=134410

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Saruka

Can you do some of my writing? You only need to do one, and I think that a good, thorough review is what I need. Here are the two stories I need to have reviewed more:

Ding Dong Part 1: Jamie

My Legacy 1: Swallowed Prologue

Thanks!

-- Kara

Hey Jyva!!
I would like some real hard review for my work -First Day of Junior High.

First Day of Junior High.

That's the first chapter of the book I'm presently writing. So I'm open to any kind of criticism,suggestions or ideas.Please do go through it during your free time...it's not a lengthy one though.

Thanks in advance:)

hi jyva i was wondering if you could please do a review on my chapter one of my book if that would be possible.

Can you review my works?-- My Legacy 1: Swallowed Prologue, My 2 Sentence Horror Stories, and Ding Dong Part 1: Jamie. Thanks! This would be really helpful.

Untitled (Zombie Apocalypse Romance Short) please!

Hi Jyva,

I have requested reviews from you in the past, and enjoyed your feedback so much I just had to return.

This is a personal narrative/essay style piece that I know needs quite a bit (ok, ALOT) of doctoring, but I feel strongly about it and would love to hear any advice you may have for improving it.

There is literally no structure to it, I kind of just threw up words all over my keyboard.

Could you maybe take a look at it please?

Insanity, Yugiyoh, and Breaking Up... Adventures in Discovering Myself.

Thanks so much for your time.

-Mav

Hi I would really like reviews for my realistic short story The Other Side it's for a short story writing competition and has to be submitted by tomorrow so I need it done asap thanks smxx

Hi. I would like an honest review for my article.
This is the link.
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Aaraju/An-Unfulfilled-Dream-135138

Thank you very much.

bump, i'm back

Hi! I think what my writing needs is some cold hard advice. Plus I'm trying to get better at accepting constructive criticism... Go at it!

DogFruit wrote:Hi! I think what my writing needs is some cold hard advice. Plus I'm trying to get better at accepting constructive criticism... Go at it!

donezo

Hello there! I don't believe I've ever gotten a review from you, so let's change that.

Keep Driving

I'd be particularly interested in your impressions of the overall tone of the piece, as well as your interpretation of what is actually going on in the story.