if you want your writing to be completely torn apart cmere

Hey Jyva I have a story named Return to Oblivion Draft that i would like to be thoroughly eviscerated. I am definitely not a great writer and i dont have a definitive writing style but perhaps some harsh criticism will help. Thanks

This please! Follow The Stars (Edited)

Would you mind reviewing Chapter 1 of the story I just started? What I need is a brutal review rn. Here it is: Chapter 1

I understand if you're too busy and I don't mind if it's after Christmas sometime, but I would TOTALLY appreciate it! Thanks!

dracowave wrote:Hey Jyva I have a story named Return to Oblivion Draft that i would like to be thoroughly eviscerated. I am definitely not a great writer and i dont have a definitive writing style but perhaps some harsh criticism will help. Thanks

done - again, sorry for the late response.

Dracula wrote:This please! Follow The Stars (Edited)

done. not bad

ElvenJedi wrote:Would you mind reviewing Chapter 1 of the story I just started? What I need is a brutal review rn. Here it is: Chapter 1

I understand if you're too busy and I don't mind if it's after Christmas sometime, but I would TOTALLY appreciate it! Thanks!

done

Let's see how brutal you really are. Tear me the hell apart. I'm a big boy, so don't you dare go easy on me. Got it?

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

Sally - Chapter One of Shattered Crowns

Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns

The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns

The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns

Daegar - Chapter Five of Shattered Crowns

The Third Son - Chapter Six of Shattered Crowns

Don't sugarcoat anything. As much as I like praise, I need an actual review.

Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!

maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!

@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it

Jyva wrote:

maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!

@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it

hey!
sorry about that, i'm still figuring out how to work this site aha

you should be able to view it now?

CarryOnMrCaulfield wrote:Let's see how brutal you really are. Tear me the hell apart. I'm a big boy, so don't you dare go easy on me. Got it?

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

Sally - Chapter One of Shattered Crowns

Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns

The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns

The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns

Daegar - Chapter Five of Shattered Crowns

The Third Son - Chapter Six of Shattered Crowns

Don't sugarcoat anything. As much as I like praise, I need an actual review.

did chapter one. uh... have fun.

maisewriting wrote:

Jyva wrote:

maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!

@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it

hey!
sorry about that, i'm still figuring out how to work this site aha

you should be able to view it now?

aye, done

Are you still doing these? Do you think you could review mine? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=133380

I'd like a review on either of the two chapters I have posted of my novel, though the second only has one review at the time I'm writing this. I'll post both links though in case you'd rather review the first chapter.

Scolopendra
Scolopendra chapter 2

Dest wrote:Are you still doing these? Do you think you could review mine? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=133380

done