~Excalibur~

First letter down is obvious. That doesn't make it a poem though. Why butcher the meter for it? I really don't see the point. If it sounds bad, it is ...

I see that I should have read the prologue. I did do so after realizing it. ~_~ Yeah you also have posted quite a bit here in the Fantasy Fiction ...

Thanks, I'm going to start on the corrections for this and all of your past reviews when I get back home on late Thurs or early friday morning. I actually ...

Thanks for the review and comments. :D Good point on the title. The title of Admiral is not validated by anyone but his crew. Since he is part of the ...

You've helped a lot. I am going to spend some time soon on correcting all of the errors you pointed out and play with other bits relating to the flow. ...

Thanks and let's see if I can more to your point, as I am learning as you tell me here. On the matter of prisoners being made into slaves, yes ...

Straight from the wiki: "As the battle was fought on a recently ploughed field, and there had recently been heavy rain leaving it very muddy, it proved very tiring to ...

All three are main characters and this is one fifth of the actual chapter which would appear in the book. Simply an introduction to the characters. Wentz is protected by ...

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Thanks for the review! I will look into it. My action scenes do feel a bit lacking when you put it that way. As for Wentz you are on the ...

Ah thanks a lot! Yes, I do see what you mean about the intro being too long! I've corrected it. If anything jumps out at you again please tell me ...

Hi again. You took my advice on the name thing I see. Works better for you I hope. Anyways, let me point out an area of trouble. -------- “Your father ...

Thanks for the review. Sorry that I don't have much to tear into. Soft is an unnecessary adjective, I'll strip it from the hardcopy for the next edit post. I ...

As I am continuing to work out the story some more I keep returning to the prologue and keep finding new ways to make it better and improve upon it. ...

Hope this doesn't bother you too much, but to clarify some instances. 1. Description preceding introduction to show who was important and why. 2. It is a title, but I'll ...