Run through water

First letter down is obvious. That doesn't make it a poem though. Why butcher the meter for it? I really don't see the point. If it sounds bad, it is bad. No point going 'oh I did this and this' if you cannot write a poem in the first place.

Save that stuff for later... it's like trying to paint neoprimitive when you cannot even paint abstract. :/

About the spelling and things, I like to put "hiddens" in my poetry. Hiddens are things that are weird and add (I think) to the poetry. If you look hard, you can see whole other dimentions in them. I know it's a little weird, but for who do we write, if not for ourselves? Oh, and by the way, the title is hidden in the poem somewhere. Can you find it?

This poem has great imagery and I did really enjoy its content.

My advise, however, would be to add some structure to this thing! ^^ Capitalization is almost a must, more punctuation is needed as well.

It takes a great artist to write poetry that does not need either...I learned that the hard way.

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rough waters
under my boat
never stop

thought I could
handle
rough waters.
out of my boat now
under my boat now
gasping for aid
hang on

Waisting river (odd word choice)
all around
three-score angels, (Keep consistant.)
entangel with nymphs, (Not good paganism_
rivals for my soal (Soul)

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No meter, no form.

It is an attempt at poetry, but you lack the focus. This hinders the concept. Try fixing up the meter and then you will be able to rewrite it more clearly.

First I'm just going to sum it up a bit: This poem definitely put images into my mind. The way you made your words flow helped the poem develop pictures. I must say though, this:

Waisting river

all around

three-score angels,

entangle with nymphs,

rivals for my soul