ziggiefred

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So I see you've already got some reviews done, good job! Anyway back to business. So I see a lot potential in this ...

Hello there :) a man lied on a bench memories rippled the canal rippled his bottle of gin hugged his smokers cough and embraced his heavy sigh. Please add some ...

Hello there :) Since you are reviewing like crazy today, I thought I would give some of your work a look! ;) So I've never read this book either and ...

Hello there :) As much as I appreciate that this is full of all the information, it kind of strikes me as more of a synopsis than a prologue. It ...

Hello there :) Shawn was worried. Why? He had a date. I find this 'Why' very unnecessary. Hmm...I feel very disappointed after reading this. There is no suspense and to ...

Hello there :) Nope, it's still just me! It's been a while since I've seen your work posted on the site too. Anyway, you're right about the typos in your ...

Hello there :) It was almost as if the weather knew that it should behave today and stop storming because this was the day, the most important day. This sentence ...

Hello there :) I should warn you, I'm not a poet ;) Anyway, there were definitely strong point in this poem like Emptiness listens to hear you sing. This line ...

Hello there :) I thought I'd do the honours. So I'd like to start with your introduction. I quite honestly feel that it's rather list-y! Your jumping from one thing ...

My first victim! :) Hello, and how're you? I'm here as requested. So let's get cracking! Your dialogue definitely needs a little work. For example, after your character says something, ...

Hello there :) I thought I'd do the honours. “Julius,” she called and approached me. “Here, drink some coffee before the day starts,” she said softly and offered me a ...

Hello there :) I definitely thought that this was very creative. The way the narrator knows a whole lot about this boy, it's jut so well thought out and planned. ...

Hello there :) Well, this was really interesting. I will first of all like to commend you on how you structured your stanzas. Quite creative! Your poem was really deep ...

Hello there :) Now I'm not much of a poet, but I thought I'd review one of your submissions ;) I felt that this was a very interesting take- interesting ...

Hello there :) Now I studied Macbeth like three years ago so from what I remember from this scene, I think you pretty much nailed it. I love the description ...