ziggiefred

Hello there :) "Let's just say," Sarah began, wriggling in her too long dress I think you meant to say "in her dress which was too long". Your story means ...

Hello there :) Your introductory paragraph to be honest is very plain and cliché. For something that is science fiction, I expect to read something like that. Also, there is ...

Hello there :) Since you are relatively new to YWS, welcome! I found this post all lonely and unanswered and it just pulled me in. Anyway, back to the review. ...

Hello there :) I will not tell you to not carry on with your story, but what you have posted so far, needs some serious revision. First of all, at ...

Hello there :) I have got to say, your writing is just so immaculate. I had to smile occasionally when I read sentences that were so descriptive and on the ...

Hello there :) Since you are relatively new here, welcome to YWS! Generally, I found this poem a little quirky and true at the same time. I have the same ...

Hello there :) Hmm...now this is what I'm talking about. You are really good, I loved this. I loved how everything meshes together and the general flow of you ideas. ...

Hello there poet and welcome to YWS! :) I found this poem quite disjointed. What I mean is you jumped all over the place, bouncing from idea to idea. So ...

Hello there :) This was really good. I have to hand it you. Ever wish you could start again, Flick a switch, Forget the pain, I just love how this ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! To me, I thought you generally had a creative idea. I liked the whole double meaning thing with the tree having actual thoughts and ...

Hello there snickerdooly, I don't believe we've met. :) I actually found repeating of "The little girl" quite annoying. The poem itself lacks a lot of 'flesh' or feeling. Although ...

Hello there :) I'll be honest and say the poem was little too plain. I know it may be one of those 'take it as it is', but it is ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Try to do as I say As I say it. Clever! Well I'm going to be a little negative. It was a very ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I think the biggest turn off about your poem is the lack of punctuation. For that reason, it's hard to grasp any emotion, ...

Hello there :) I'm not much of a poet myself, but this was really good. Although I have seen the whole overshadowed, underdog theme before, I loved the way you ...