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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Never Loved

    Hello there and welcome :) I will have to agree with the previous reviewer on certain levels about the poem. First of all I felt that the whole structure was ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Crickets

    Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) When I saw the title of this poem, I was a little under the impression that I was going to read about crickets...well ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Untitled story as of now

    Hello there Shadowlight! :) Well I thought the plot so far is quite creative. Now I'm going to take this as an abstract instead of a well established story because ...

    Dec 21, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: What will People Say?

    Hello there :) I understand what creative approach you were going for here and it's kind of catchy. However, out of all the stanza's I had a problem with the ...

    Dec 19, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Reap Your Rewards

    Hello there :) The slip of your tonge The turn of my world. The treachery undeniable The conciquence unavoidable. I loved this stanza, it was just so flawless; well except ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Prosperity (or A Promising Site For Development)

    Hello there :) Since you're relatively new, welcome to YWS! At first I really did not get what was going on in this poem. I think the major problem is ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Love flu

    Hello there :) To be honest, there is nothing really special about this poem. It's very plain and simple. I think the only commendable thing about it is the fact ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The tales of Peter Lynch !!!! xxxx please read guys (:

    Hello there :) One ruthlessly cold English day in the Autumn of 1926 a rather important child was born, into a rather unfortunate family. The Lynch family were not unfortunate ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Rain

    Hello there :) I really liked the simplicity of your piece. You had some great vivid descriptions in there. The story was not rusty at all. A warm breeze found ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Once Upon A Midnight Dreary [Edited]

    Hello there :) The previous reviewer kind of outlined a lot I wanted to say so I'll just state the obvious. I think your writing is really good. Your descriptions ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Perseverance (chapter one)

    Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I felt his hand on my wiry bicep, the dull dig of his dirty nails. The touch sent a chill of disgust snaking ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Heard in the Silence

    Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I'll start with the bad. I thought that your story, though interesting, was very hard to follow at certain levels. This is because ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Insomnia.

    Hello there :) I think what you have here is just fine.The whole thing is exactly what I was expecting to see when I saw the title "Insomnia", which makes ...

    Dec 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Innocence

    Hello there :) I just couldn't resist reviewing this. Well for one it was definitely better than the previous poem of yours that I read. I always admire an attempt ...

    Dec 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Dog and Me

    Hello there :) Aww, this is really sweet. I had a dog once. She died a year ago but she was my best mate when she was alive. Anyway, back ...

    Dec 15, 2010


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