zelithon

Nice title, i only read it because it reminded me of the pirates of the carribean. I am happy to say I actually liked the poem as well. The one ...

You... are so smart it hurts my ego. Thanks alot. Anyway fantastic poem. You should show it to your english teacher if you are happening to do peotry in your ...

((OOC: This is my first ever attempt at romantic fiction, so feel free to give pointers :D )) Chapter 1 I was at the local dog park, walking my extremely ...

I like the plot also I LOVE weird writing-its the only writing buond to make you famous just as C.S. Lewis has shown. "I haven't found it yet," he said, ...

I like the first two lines easpeashally but the last two lines seem a bit forced. Are you going to show this to Shawn? Also I thought we agreed he ...

I am not so interested in your grammar nessisarily (i know your snickering at that one) as much as your plot. I know it may suond romantic to just randomly ...

AH i like the content but not the words. Or are content and words the same thing? Alas i do not know. Point is I like the plot. I have ...

:shock: Gosh now in days nothing is bad enuoph for me to critique. That was SPLENDID. i hate you for it. I wish i cuold write like that. Incredable. Fantabulus.

:shock: Holy cow... ... um.... Well then i... :shock: That was practicully one of the best poems i have ever read! It rivals my favorate poet, Clive Barker. Sorry i ...

Well that was cirtainly a love story or the beggining of one atleast. But i think you are trying to rap up too much into one plot. One story about ...

You wrote “Yeah,” Jason said laughing, “All the money I've ever had always [b]went [/b] to buying animals and their food.” Went should be goes Also theyshuold be exited to ...

Reminds me of invader zim and mad lims. Facinateing choise for a name, Bacon Soap. Why? I found it highly amuseing but not totally coherent. Over all a befundleing peice ...

you wrote: "West Point—the university of his dreams. He’d always wanted to go into the military, ever since we were kids. I can remember one time in middle school when ...

Reminds me s0mhow of the secret life of bees. I only looked at it because it shared the title of a book i am currently reading so, great title! :shock:

Old L... GOOD JOB! Extremly amusing. :P poor little egg :cry: