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Wow! This is amazing! I know it's older, but it just sucked me in! Very interesting concept, and quite original as always Snoink! ;) ~Yoyo 8)

Ooooh! This was cool! Good meter and rhyming throughout. And I really live the parts in parenthases. I looove the last two stanzas and the couplet ending. The only thing ...

I think this poem is weak. This is what I call a "woe-is-me" poem. Love is the thing that makes you crush But that is never going to happen to ...

Cute! I think this flowed really well, I don't have much to complain about. I think you've really got the middle school atmosphere down. It reminded me of my 8th ...

Ooooh, nifty word. I like the rhythm and the rhyme sheme. The third stanza kind of irks me using "smile" and "smiles" in the first two lines. If you can ...

This was good. You have all the frustrated emotions down really well. It's really confusing though because all of a sudden there's a Chris and a Dave without any explaination ...

Wow. This is gorgeous. The concept behind this is so beautiful and touching. And you used punctuation and capitalization. My only issue, I'd change the colon in line two of ...

Oooh! Lovely. I like the repitition, as Eimear said. Really good though. I love theater and it made me feel like I was back stage. Dunno about the acting part, ...

The first and second stanzas read a lot like prose. I'd change that around so it doesn't. Third stanza, maybe "quote" the italic bit. But definitely capitalize "I've." Fourth stanza, ...

"high" and "bright" ehhh... not quite a rhyme. And "heavily" and "angry" definitely do not rhyme. I read those and I'm just like, "Whoa!" because it's so off. Besides that ...

Wow, I really love this. I think everything is fine just how you have it, contrary to what Bear said. (Sorry Bear!) And it is definitely not cliche. Ignore Simon. ...

Wow. I really liked this. Something about it pulled me in. My only critique would be to capitalize a little bit more. Not every line, but maybe the beginning of ...

Awesome! Keep going! I don't want to critique much until the end. I have to know if the theme of the story persists in order to know if anything is ...

I like this a lot! The rhyming was pretty good. A little off in places, but I'm no expert in that, so I have no suggestions. The one thing that ...

Ahhhh!!! That's it?? I need more! You've got me hooked now. Sorry I don't have much more critique than that. I was to involved in the plot and her feelings ...