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This was interesting. Was this for the 150 words contest? Out of curiosity, what was your prompt? Anyway, this was pretty well written and worth reading, though - obviously - ...

Wow. I'm almost speechless. Almost. This was pretty much incredible. And the twist at the end was just... wow. I certainly didn't expect for the prey to be a man. ...

You're Your scent lingers all around me. I wish you would envelope me. Please. I'd give it al all to feel you near me again. I'd give it all for ...

I thought I’d be more upset But I’m just in a ret What's a ret? I seriously dictionary'd that and the best I got was 'soak in water to soften ...

Wow. While this was a tiny bit confusing to me (but then, I'm tired, and generally don't understand things when tired xP), it was very powerful. Your imagery was amazing, ...

comments changes I know this has already been pointed out, but I'm going to assume your title got cut off. I'd suggest shortening it, so it intrigues us a bit ...

Wow. This was truly the awesomest story ever. It was so awesome that I fell upon my knees and burst into tears (of laughter), but unfortunately oceans don't form from ...

I'm sure just about any writer can connect with this piece, for sure. :) Overall, it was generally well done and entertaining to read, as well as incredibly familiar. I ...

Well, this was definitely dark, and overall I liked it. Your descriptions and repetitions were well done, and the poem generally gives off a powerfully depressive feel. All of the ...

corrections/changes comments I blinked, I swallowed, then raised my eyebrows. I wanted to laugh for some reason or to scream. -- I didn't like this line all that much. I ...

Personally, I know nothing about nuns in the 1800s, so if anything's unhistorical, I can't exactly comment. It seems very factual to me, though, and I can definitely say that ...

changes/corrections comments That dark, grim door mocks me as I sit here. (-- I might suggest a more interesting way to start this; while it is relatively short, you still ...

Hey; Well I found this... interesting. Once I managed to get past the abbreviations/spelling issues, it was interesting enough. Overall, the story idea is interesting but I feel like the ...

comments changes Thunder claps, the sky grows dark. Bring on the rain. Lightning where is the spark? This line didn't seem right to me. I'd suggest revising the one above ...

comments The golden stars are what makes me smile on the darkest nights, I feel like this line was too long in comparison. Try to shorten it. How about: Golden ...