written_on_my_heart

almost as good as the last and I must say that I will check up on your new additions! Maybe as a formal request you could make an ode to ...

I love it because it is honest and true. Sweet and simple. Life is a bitch, but you know, what can we really do???

The tone is very angry... do you need to talk to someone? I understand the overall idea but it conveys to the reader a very negative irony. Try again sweetheart.

critique this please?

You know what, I am not just going to put down this poem because I don't believe in god... It was good... even if he isn't physically here to read ...

Very nice, well done.... one problem.. I think that this poem would have sounded 10X much better if you continued the rhyme scheme. Other than that.... great very nice.

awww... how sad... but we all feel this way sometimes... is this anything that connects to you personally? I really like this poem! It is short, sweet, and to the ...

amazing, that was a really strong poem. Consider publishing that in a book or something. You wouldn't want anyone stealing that! :)

okay first off, I saw one mistake... you spelled lying wrong... (see above)... Other than that it was superb... the rythm was great and kept my attention throughout the literary ...

I think that this is very sweet. Have you had thoughts of showing it to him when conditions permit?

ermm.. there's somthing missing..

umm.. more like a story oppose to a poem.. call it prose may i?

wonderful... might I add that you are a beautiful poet?

amazing... wish others felt the same about my poetry:(

It's me again.. just adding that you should maybe add a title such as "angelo"