wonderland

Hey, paris! I'm wonderland, and I'm gonna review you're first chapter here Alright, so, right off the bat, please please remember to indent a new paragraph when someone talks! You ...

Hey, Silver! I'm wonderland and I have the pleasure of doing a review! Alright, so, right off the bat, woah. Solid! You've totally wrapped me in! I'm hooked. I really ...

Hi, Rainbowdell! I'm wonderland, and I am going to review your work! Alright, so, right off the bat, your first sentence is At last Friday had finally come, and I ...

Alright, so! This is a good start and I enjoy your sense of character and setting. However, I think that the first flashback scene is a little superfluous. I also ...

Hi! Alright, so, this was really good. Very good. I adore how you used a sort of mix of second and third perspective. (It doesn't seem like such a popular ...

Hi! Alright, so, I really liked the piece, but I couldn't help but feel it was lacking something. I really enjoyed your sense of character and your description of setting ...

Alright, so! First, wow. Just wow. Okay, so, your sense of character and description is fantastic. I also like how you placed it in present tense instead of past, that ...

Hi, Hannah! I don’t think I’ve read anything of yours, so this is super exciting! The one nitpicky thing I could find. and maybe the would would have burned around ...

Alright, so, this was interesting, and you have a good start. I don’t have many technical things for you, just doing a grammar/spell check. My nitpicks lie more with the ...

Alright, so, you have a really solid start here, but the thing you are missing most is a sense of emotion. Your writing and way with words is solid, but ...

Alright, so, at first I thought it was like Harper Lee’s To Kill A Mockingbird, with an older character looking back on past events. A lake narrates this story, and ...

Alright, so, wow. Nit picky things first! Of course, as usual, run a spelling/grammar check, for this like “If you’re going to college you should sign up for a creative ...

Alright, so, this is a good start, but I was a little bit confused as to why this is a prologue. But first, the technical nit picky things. Watch your ...

Alright, so! Right off the bat, you need you divide this up into stanzas, where every the thought or emotion changes. Stanzas lead for easier readings, also they show the ...

Hi! So, right off the bat, I adore your narration style! it's super strong, and super gripping. You write in a way that makes it almost impossible to stop reading, ...