wildnaturespirit

That was enjoyable. It was fast paced and would make an excellent begginig for a story. The ending really left me hanging. Is it a dead silence? or a waiting ...

:D Ok, it really seems like this might be headed somewhere interesting but, your readers may have difficulty staying interested. This part seemed a little bland. Like flounder (you know, ...

Wow, that was really entertaining. I love how your character thinks. You know, just the fact that she thinks. People seem so mindless sometimes. That is the beauty of first ...

This was a pretty good story and wasnt empty like most stories from animal points of view. I really enjoyed the ending because of the loving sadness it held. But ...

Ok, this is a really interesting idea. :D But I think that your first paraghraph could be better. It seems like you are trying to cram information in really fast, ...

Sounds interesting, I want more. Prehaps a little more 'wolf imagery', wolves use scent and sound more then sight. When saying something is coming you might want to have your ...

Again very good. I like the nightmare. One thing that jumped at me other than the nothing moved, which has already been discussed was: "He was staring into the dark ...

Whoa! That was a huge jump. I kind of wondered what was going on at first but then it clicked. when you talked about the clouds racing from horizon to ...

Wow. I like the style of it. I really want to read more! The one thing that I didn't really understand was the line: "He was aware." I didn't really ...

This really grabbed me. It makes a good start. Pulling readers into the story with a mysterious begining can really make the difference. I am eager to read more. But ...