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^^ I read through this now, and Colly here is right. There's only two rhyme sounds in a villanelle -- that's essential. So you might want to do some major ...

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Yeah... I'm overall not happy with this piece. But how exactly would I implement it in a story? You mean as part of a story, by getting rid of the ...

I'll only argue one point before humbly editing this, and that's that the dear spell check put up a huge fight on this piece. It was NOT happy. So I ...

No comments at all?!? -jabs finger at sub-title-

Well, my crit ticks are generic, so use it elsewhere if you please. Also, the conversion rate is something like 1 tick = .0642 Yen

Eh. Your rhymes were a stretch... But the ending was the shiz. :D Quite humorous, I rather enjoyed it.

Well, they only glowed because she passed through the security prism. I think I should make that clearer... And I'm planning on tying in the color with the plot, so ...

Fand, I can't thank you enough for that wonderfully indepth critique, I've re-written it... I'm especially curious to see opinions on the new ending. I haven't decided whether or not ...

Harry Potter, on the other hand, is fun to read. woopdyfriggindoo. Isn't the point of a book to be fun to read? Tolkein's Lord of the Rings is a breathtakign, ...

It was ok. I didn't feel like I was rapped around it. Some parts were week. Some things were confusing, it was to short too. I am, sorry, it didn't ...

The Dark Is Rising Seqence by Susan Cooper The Dark Tower Series by Stephen King EDIT- I second the nomination for A Wrinkle In Time

well, frankly, I think you summed this up quite nicely with: "and out popped a poem, with an emo touch to it, It felt as though it was rushed, containing ...

Hilary Clinton? -cocks eyebrow- Nice touch, that was. I never new she was capable of compassion , though

Most certainly did. I was thinking far to small-scale. Thankee much