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I still don't think that the crucifix reference holds, even after your explanation. Yes, Jesus was willing to give anything for those he loved. Here, it seems like the subject ...

the crucifix reference is because Jesus was willing to give anything for those he loved. This poem is essentially an extension of that idea--that the narrator just wishes for a ...

I'll put it plainly: You're 12 years old and you've got some faulty ideas about what poetry is . Once you manage to get past these preconceptions , you can ...

EDIT: My comp had a stroke, the above was posted twice. Sorry :S

WHENCE! You are supposed to post all the parts TOGETHER. I mean, I like to have points and everything, but still! You post them together so that we can make ...

Zee, you're too kind :p Oh, and edited

Oh dear Colly, I never clarified that? :S

which part of the title? Rounded With A Sleep Pt. 1: Something To Do With A Stripper's Name "Rounded With A Sleep" = a piece of a famous Shakespeare quote. ...

Way to scare everyone away from my contest :p

Alright, Edited and updated with B's old-but-not-forgotten suggestions! EDIT: Added a line

By the way; I thought Fortinbrass was a dog (like from A Wrinkle in Time). But then I wasn't sure if it was another word for the devil? random question: ...

I think Ried and Claw covered this well, I just thought I'd mention that technically you're supposed to crit 2 pieces before posting one of your own. Naggingly Yours, ~Ed

dear god..you actually went back to those, B? :roll: Remind me to remind you how awesome you are

you should watch the vid! I edited in a link :D And really, isn't it worth it to see cheerleaders with gasmasks?

Better suited for prose poetry, actually. As it is, it can't assert itself as a poem enough to justify leaving it as such. But as for the content, it reminds ...