Always.
Even after all this time,
______Your way forward is clear.
We were talking of minds
______And my soul.
I shall never reveal the best of you.
If you're wondering why all of those lines sound familiar, it's because they're rearranged lines of dialogue from chapter thirty-three of Deathly Hallows. If you've read it, you know what chapter I'm talking about.
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Kitty, that's my favorite part of writing. (S'funny; people never see the meanings I intend for them to see, they come up with other stuff instead.)
... and, er, sorry, whence. *meep*
Way to scare everyone away from my contest :p
Lol. Don't you love it when people read meaning in our poetry that we did not initially put there? This does feel really deep and I love that you've taken actual lines from the book. That's such a clever idea. The last line is perfect I think and so very fitting. In fact, I have no suggestions. The indention works, the separation of the last is effective and the lines themselves are great. The poem as a whole is rather vague which leaves it open to wide interpretation and the lines are so vague that double meanings are easily found. Very nice and the best of luck in the contest!
Thank you all. I really appreciate the feedback. (It's especially nice to hear that my poetry is all right, because I don't write it very often.)
Imp, d'you mind specifying the double meanings you saw? (I'm curious. I, er, didn't really plan this one out. Just sort of wrote it.)
Oy, the final remarks set up as a poem are more than clever. You've got double-meanings and depth in the best possible way. Brevity with thought - soul of wit, yes? In this case, poignancy.
The best of luck the The Snape contest.
IMP
NOOOOO!!! SNAPE!!! DUMBLEDORE!!!
Like others said before me, it's beautiful in a sad way...
Completely wonderful, and sadly romantic.
*Applause to you* for writing the best Snape poem, in my opinion, in the world.
...it's beautiful, darling. Truly. (crap, I might as well go withdrawl my entries right now....)