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Ok, zero responses? Not cool. However, this poem wasn't exactly at the 'cool' mark either. It seemed like you attempting to prove a poor-argued point, and you just ended up ...

Whoa... where have I seen this before?!?! Everywhere. And the caps was excesssive at best. It just screams 'mediocre piece that relies on tacky distracting devices to make itself known'. ...

The above has covered the content quite nicely, so rather then doing so I'll launch into one of my rants. Your subtitle gives me ulcers. Not the nice, bubbly, they're-a-hit-at-parties ...

The main thing that bugged me about this was the last line of the chorus. It seems to be missing a syllable or two [or at least that's how I ...

You... never even finished this sentence-of-a-poem. You never conveyed what idea might've inspired this. You never even finished up this fragmented series of poorly connected images. What was with the

I can see some weird drama kid acting this out with beret atop his head and overdone hand motions as accompaniment. Ok, work on a singular overall theme to weave ...

Ahh.. harshness time. I only got halfway through. And it was a struggle, at that. It was either blatantly cliche, or it sounded like rambling. For the former-- If you're ...

I haven't read through the the crits [short amount of time] so forgive me if I repeat what they've already said. To start with-- please read through this before posting ...

Ok...I'll be less attempt-at-witty and more honest, then. I found it... slightly original I suppose. The flow was strained at best and I attempted to read it aloud--an endeavor I ...

Oh...potential... Yes, I think a revamped fully-narrative version could be more interesting. And punctuation helps. As for content.... Well, make it more poetic if that makes sense. It seemed awkward ...

Ok, much less cliche then I expected. However, this needs some major work. The first glaring thing I noticed was punctuation I'll edit in a link to Claw's wonderful article ...

I skimmed the first and last page of responses. And now I'll force my opinions upon you: Lord of the Rings, on any literary level, is superior to Harry Poetter. ...

Show, don't tell. Though doing both can be effective at times, for now I'd reccomend focusing on the former However, you need to work on your phrasings. Cut the fluff- ...

This was an interesting take to do. I love the jumpyness of this anthology/novel. It reflects my own scatter-mindedness, and is a creative comfort, of sorts. With that being said, ...

Eh. Watch more Mythbusters. Either a: the landmass wouldn't be dense enough to create a vortex. OR b: it would be, and thus the vortex would suck down immediatley. Regardless, ...