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The rhyming scheme didn't work here. If anything, it detracted from the content and the flow, which isn't good. I'd say go for more vivid imagery. And here I mean ...

a different style then I'm accustomed to, surely. But that doesn't make it bad in it's own way... My main gripe with this was your ending. It fell short of ...

Eh... I've read many, many poems extremely similar to this. Try to take the topic in a new direction, why couldn't he say it back? Did he even really love ...

On a random note: I was looking through the picture thread, and saw the picture. Yeah, that jacket is pretty freaking awesome. But in additional regards to the poem: I ...

This...did nothing for me. The girl's description was vague and generalized. It gave me no insight into who she was, or what this poem was even about. Though unlike Claw, ...

I love your voice, really I do. But this one didn't quite fulfill your usual....ness.Yeah... I guess it was a little too...expected? "We thought about death, the solidity of walls, ...

Silly-analogy time! This poem was like tar cleverly diguised as licorice; I'm expecting a gummy treat, sticky at times maybe; but the kind of sticky that sticks to your teeth ...

This displayed the emotional range of a cupboard door. Did you learn about expressing yourself watching Degrassi? Be original! There's nothing here that I couldn't have found on the back ...

I was told it never snowed in Misery, but lovers tend to lie. On first glance, it seems insubstantial, but if you delve a bit deeper, I think one can ...

Poetry and Punctuation That's a start. It's much too rambly. Like Amelia said, I'd completely forgotten what I was reading 5 lines in. It's overbearing, and I know it's very ...

This took me a bit of thought-- and I like that. I can't truly appreciate the Casablanca quote, never having seen the movie myself. However, the true wonder in this ...

gah. Rhyme-scheme-on-crack. It really did a number on the flow. Either set an actual format to follow with your rhymes, or don't use them. For this poem, I think they ...

god, it was way too rambly. And the red font is just a gimmick; if you need to lean on that, then the piece can't stand on its own. Also, ...

I think you could be a bit more ambiguous with this and still pull it off. In fact, I think it could add a lot. However, nix the rhymes. Wording ...

Try to work on coming up with new ways to describe things, not just the same ol' same ol' "Nobody answered... Complete silence. " etc. Oh, and you might want ...